Firecracker

Firecracker

A Poem by duff
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West Texas and it’s Fourth of July

Scorpion roadkill baking in the sun

A Marlboro Red recollection crime

Little girl became darlin' for his fun

Silhouette standing in the doorway

Long sleeves and triple digit heat   

Busted up lip split like the highway

Chasing dragons at the age of 16

Bus stop bought a ticket to Austin

Boogeyman here turn out the light

A tumbleweed blowing in the wind    

Loaded .45 killed daddy that night

© 2020 duff


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This tumble of gut-wrenching history tumbles forth in much the same way as when we watch a very troubled young person act out in heart-wrenching ways. Likely we don't know this troubled person's history, but we're left guessing at it . . . & it sounds something like this poem, what we imagine. The tumbling-word sensation one gets while reading this is similar to the way troubled signs pour off someone like this, their every mannerism a banner of low self-esteem advertising a long & troubled past. I'm sorry I haven't seen you around lately (I've been sketchy) & then I'm forgetful so I don't look up people I haven't seen in a while. It's really great to read you! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

10 Months Ago

Thank you Margie! I appreciate you and your insight. I hope you're well and its great to be back i.. read more



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Another well set scene as an abused child takes revenge in the heat of Texas and takes advantage of fireworks/firecrackers to kill her father. Full of pathos and atmosphere.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

6 Months Ago

Thank you John
Howdy, Duff ✪

Brilliant work, Poet!
It's ironic I would stumble upon this, being a Native Houstonian. But, having lived in Odessa and Lubbock for more than a decade allows me to appreciate this well-struck piece all the more, and In ways nothing else could.
You set the scene such that it reads like a dark Pocketbook Mystery Novel of incestuously deserved justice, leaving the unfortunate victim to wander aimlessly, bitterly justified; yet, marked for life.

A fantastically rendered, all too real, well-presented Free Verse, from the pen of an obviously highly skilled poet … KUDOS, Duff! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

6 Months Ago

Thank you Richard! I appreciate the kind review
Richard 🍃

6 Months Ago

No biggie.
Short and impactful. You have covered a great deal of ground in this sad tale of abuse. It happens everywhere, not just in Texas. Well done duff.

Chris

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

9 Months Ago

Very sad indeed. Thank you Chris
Many stories in these words my friend. Each statement adding to the strength of the words. I was stationed in Texas for seven years. I still miss highway 35 and Austin. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

9 Months Ago

I lived in Dallas for five years but Austin is so much better. Your kindness is very much appreciate.. read more
Coyote Poetry

8 Months Ago

I loved Austin, Texas. Dallas, too big. I hope you are enjoying the days of Summer.
“Scorpion roadkill baking in the sun”- what a myriad of images your powerful descriptions evoke! ‘ West Texas and a Marlboro Red recollection crime’- Boom! Your dramatic words tell an ageless story of violence and abuse. Yes, even a tumbleweed fights back sometimes.. Great write!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

9 Months Ago

Thank you my friend!
This tumble of gut-wrenching history tumbles forth in much the same way as when we watch a very troubled young person act out in heart-wrenching ways. Likely we don't know this troubled person's history, but we're left guessing at it . . . & it sounds something like this poem, what we imagine. The tumbling-word sensation one gets while reading this is similar to the way troubled signs pour off someone like this, their every mannerism a banner of low self-esteem advertising a long & troubled past. I'm sorry I haven't seen you around lately (I've been sketchy) & then I'm forgetful so I don't look up people I haven't seen in a while. It's really great to read you! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

10 Months Ago

Thank you Margie! I appreciate you and your insight. I hope you're well and its great to be back i.. read more
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Gee
Yep, I concur with the sweet lady below. Very well written

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

10 Months Ago

Thank you Gee.
Gee

10 Months Ago

Pleasure :)
wow - love this.

I like the tightly written style

The story within here could be a novel

You have a way of make images scream. Nice one.

Second line brings everything to a halt.

Inspiring - well done !!!



Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

10 Months Ago

Thank you for your kindness. I'm happy you enjoyed it!

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