City Girl

City Girl

A Poem by duff
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Her dress wept with rain

Mascara streaking black

Dashing heels drowning

The daily news umbrella

Reading for stormy days

Sly crosswalk negotiator

Taxis soaked in stoplight

A symphony conducting

The skyscraper acoustic

Streets breathing heavy

Into the night she struts


© 2020 duff


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I was born in the city of London. I would find it impossible to live there with the hustle and bustle now. I'm a country girl at heart. Your imagery reminded me of where I once used to be. Give me the open air rather than the city lights. Well penned lines.

Chris

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

5 Months Ago

Thank you Chris!



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Lovely description and metaphor use, simply adore that first line as the rain weeps from her coat in a Chicago type street, saw her as a street woman in this? I also had the Eagles song 'Lyin Eyes' playing in my head!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

2 Months Ago

Thank you John! I love your vision
I love your choice of imagery, painting this tapestry to feel like it's gotta be tough to struggle thru bad weather & the city hustle, adorned in makeup & heels. I've always thought it a bit of nonsense that women choose to dress in a way that doesn't jive with what the day may have in store. I can't decide if your poem is a little bit ironic about this (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

2 Months Ago

Thank you Margie. Grinning huge.
It's quite remarkable, Duff 🤫

… how this is the second poem of yours I've run across I can so distinctly relate to.
Having been born 'n bred in Houston's Northeast ghetto, the scene you've painted upon the page, and into my head, is intimately familiar.
One of the several highlights of your work that strikes my practiced, admiring eye, is your unique style of metaphor and adjective descriptives … creating a sort of cinematic ambiance of textures, colors, and hues the mind's-eye can almost feel, ie:
"Her dress wept with rain"
"Dashing heels drowning"
"Taxis soaked in stoplight"
"Streets breathing heavy"
Then, there is your exactness in structured presentation that reveals the need/tendency for balance, and the effort required to fit meaningful/unstilted lines so evenly matched … it's quite appealing to my own sense of order and discipline; though, in different ways, except displayed in some of my concrete/shape poetry.

Anyway, let me close (finally!) by saying how very much I enjoy and appreciate your style and skill … and, thank you for such an excellent moment shared, Syr Poet! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

2 Months Ago

Thank you Richard! I am very grateful.
Richard 🍃

2 Months Ago

Aw,
It was nothin'.
A City Girl- she is someone with a gait, an air of style, fashionable, dashing in her walk . The surroundings and atmosphere - taxis, stoplight, skyscraper, streets, it all adds to the description so well, I could just picture this in my head. The style of writing is what caught my eye, nice reading. Thank you Duff.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

3 Months Ago

Thank you Abhilash! Truly appreciate it
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Gee
Left me feeling a wee bit claustrophobic with the hustle, bustle, noise ringing in my ears. I'm a village boy who much prefers to be dwarfed by trees rather than buildings.
You write really well Duff( as many probably tell you)

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

4 Months Ago

I agree. I love the city but prefer the quiet of a smaller town. Thank you Gee.
I have always loved the city life. The imagery in your poem is wonderful. My worst days in a city have always been better than beautiful days anywhere else. I enjoyed this piece very much and I hope you have a wonderful week. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

4 Months Ago

Thank you Nicole!
City Girl, that's a very nice film! Inside my head of course. What a busy street to get caught in the rain. :)

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

5 Months Ago

Thanks Yan! Ya, its just an image that stuck
I really enjoyed these creatively penned descriptions of a rainy time....

Posted 5 Months Ago


duff

5 Months Ago

Awesome! Thank you Dhara
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

5 Months Ago

Welcome Ana :)))
this piece let's us
feel the fast paced
rush of the big busy
city..noise ..lights ..
action..

city girl reminds
me of Anne Hathaway
in the movie
"The Devil Wears Prada"
she runs herself silly
as Meryl Streep s
whipping girl ..great
movie ..

much enjoyed this poem
nicely penned


Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

5 Months Ago

Thank you Fran! I'm happy you liked it
"Taxis soaked in stoplight" love that line.

well from the male perspective, I can really appreciate this poem...having grown up in my early days of living in the Bronx...and hearing all of the music in this poem...and for the sights that reflect for me such memories.
j.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

duff

5 Months Ago

Thank you Jacob

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