I'm new here & joined to get some ideas & help on my poetry & maybe even help some people too :)
It's awesome that you are a grammar teacher!!! Just the kind of person to review a poem :D
My Mom is turning 54 on 10-2-16 & she is Libra which is an air sign. For her birthday I am sending my Mom up in a HOT AIR BALLOON!!! I am attempting to finish a poem I started which I will hand write in a card & give to her along with her ticket. Here is what I got so far:
'Up in the sky where the sun shines bright
& the moon tells secrets to the stars at night;
& the magpie nests in an old oak tree
while a crisp autumn wind rustles it's leaves.
Up in the sky where a rainbow's tied
& a huge elephant... YES, that's what I spied!
& there's a pirate ship, jolly roger flying proud,
drifting through the sky as a whit puffy cloud.
All my dreams & imagination
never took me to this destination.
Fireworks, down under, Paris, a zoo,
a yellow brick road, an ocean of blue,
& a million other things rolled into one
couldn't, just couldn't, be half as fun
as...'
& here is where I get stuck. Figuring I have 1-2 more paragraphs to go, are there any suggestions on how I can tie this thing up?
I am going for the whimsical feeling here because hot air balloons in themselves are whimsical.
Suggestions for the beginning & body are welcome too, however I really need to concentrate on the ending.
Thnx for any advice & input you can give!!!