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Help with Special Birthday Poem?7 Years AgoHi, this is TY! I'm new here & joined to get some ideas & help on my poetry & maybe even help some people too :)
My Mom is turning 54 on 10-2-16 & she is Libra which is an air sign. For her birthday I am sending my Mom up in a HOT AIR BALLOON!!! I am attempting to finish a poem I started which I will hand write in a card & give to her along with her ticket. Here is what I got so far: 'Up in the sky where the sun shines bright & the moon tells secrets to the stars at night; & the magpie nests in an old oak tree while a crisp autumn wind rustles it's leaves. Up in the sky where a rainbow's tied & a huge elephant... YES, that's what I spied! & there's a pirate ship, jolly roger flying proud, drifting through the sky as a whit puffy cloud. All my dreams & imagination never took me to this destination. Fireworks, down under, Paris, a zoo, a yellow brick road, an ocean of blue, & a million other things rolled into one couldn't, just couldn't, be half as fun as...' & here is where I get stuck. Figuring I have 1-2 more paragraphs to go, are there any suggestions on how I can tie this thing up? I am going for the whimsical feeling here because hot air balloons in themselves are whimsical. Suggestions for the beginning & body are welcome too, however I really need to concentrate on the ending. Thnx for any advice & input! Lava you, TY |