Jeru-Zion

about hurling towards death

Underneath my skin is a galaxy

Of steel wrapped in coal

Break down the ego within a rainbow

No quantum touch can heal you

Black clouds scatter the soul

Egypt is gone

Seven layers evaporate

 

Strange will has not failed you

All your life you have prepared for this

Memorized hand shakes with knotted lips

Cool down the steel

Crucifixion never felt so good

Sex only numbs the pain

 

All is one beyond the moon and the sun

What ends has just begun

Shift effortlessly

Atoms slow in a blink into eternity

Vibrate a new light

A gift, a disappointment

 

Under my skin

Is an accident waiting to happen

 

Author's Note

Let me know what you think

Reviews

[Transience]

the poem abounds with scientific lexicon still it lacks that feel of a meretricious jargon pile. the first line was awesome.really unique.1st stanza is ethereal,but somehow i felt the flow gets a bit disrupted in the second one.third one complements the first and the ending was unexpected,to be honest.i mean your choice of words.can't say it felt perfect,but the brilliant theme triumphed it all.

egypt and seven layers-what do they signify??the zion part of the title eluded me as well.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

Zion represents a sort of Paradise, illumination. Egypt represents the world and the mind while the seven layers represent both the journey to the next world which according to the Kabbalah you must go through seven layers, also we have seven layers of skin which I thought was interesting since when we die and leave the body maybe that the seven layers that we go through. I mix and max a lot of different ideas in my work sometimes it's cool sometimes it backfires but I also try to write free form. Overall I hope I conveyed a feeling or at least something thoughtful to those who read my work.

[Transience]

really illuminating.different cultures paint different vistas regarding the passage to the netherworld and it's ever fascinating to know them.why egypt to denote the world?am curious.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

In Rastafari and Moorish Science they use Egypt to represent the earthly world and I like that

[Transience]

i see.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

sorry for all the typos, it's only after going back to read a few days later do I see them mocking me.lol

[Heather]

I have read this poem a few times, because the images in it are so profound. Break down the ego within the rainbow.. wow! I love reading your poems!

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

Thank you very much it means a lot to me.

[MOON]

Hurtling towards death unmasking ourselves shedding skins learning lessons lots of different imagery here. Lovely write.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

Thank you

[kublakhan27]

I really like the imagery in this one...it paints a powerful picture for sure.

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

Thank you very much