Tales of life

Dream for a moment and think about life,
happy dreams or sad dreams whatever you think
dream of a fairy and dream of a knife,
you'll dream and dream till your heart can sing

Dreams of love and dreams of hope,
no matter who you are, you can dream you are a star.
Dreaming is hoping, it can create a rope,
for you to climb up, so your goal is not far

You are a bird, you can fly in the sky,
you can also wish and become a kite.
That is it, dreams make you try,
go on dreaming, your future is bright 

Author's Note

i need your comments

Reviews

[harshita]

dreams are like stars you may never touch them but if you chase them they'll lead you to your destiny.... :)
great job my friend... :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The theme is present...I see these are getting better as I read them...but again...the format of this can be done again...and get the verse where it needs to be:

Dream for a moment and think about life,
happy dreams or sad dreams whatever you think
dream of a fairy and dream of a knife,
you'll dream and dream till your heart can sing

Dreams of love and dreams of hope,
no matter who you are, you can dream you are a star.
Dreaming is hoping, it can create a rope,
for you to climb up, so your goal is not far

You are a bird, you can fly in the sky,
you can also wish and become a kite.
That is it, dreams make you try,
go on dreaming, your future is bright

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Dream for a moment, think about life,
happy dreams or sad ones, whatever you think
dream of a fairy or dream of a knife,
you'll dream till your heart can sing

Dreams of love and of hope,
no matter who you are, dream you are a star.
Dreaming is hope, it can create a rope,
for you to climb up, so your goal is not far

You are a bird, fly in the sky,
you can also wish and be a kite.
That is it, dreams make you try,
go on dream, your future is bright

[Edward Lancheister]

good rhyme and positive message about life, keep it up :)

[Nayan]

Very heartening to read aloud this rhyming poem of dream, of hope, of love and of life!!

[Sami Khalil]

This was sooo good. Bravo....................

[ASHIDASH]

THANKS SAMI

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome....:).....

[Sunny]

I like it! It's definitely worth reading!

[ASHIDASH]

Thank you Sunny

[Happy hours]

dreams are limitless.....nice poem....

[ASHIDASH]

Thank you for the comment

[Sreenath]

i remember it resembles when i started writing ...you are just 17 great start keep on writing you will improve
as far as this poem nice piece... inspiring to walk towards dream...
i feel as if the words are squeezed to rhyme which can be ignored on the whole nice one keep on writing you will reach there.....

[ASHIDASH]

Thanks alot Shree

[Tusitala Tom]

Hi, Ashidash.
You ask for comments. The optimism and happiness along with advice shows throughout this poem; it is light a cheery. Improvement? Yes. In the stanzas themselves. If you want every second line to have a matching ending you need to be consistent all the way through. For example, I'd make that first stanza to read:
Dream for a moment and think about life,
Happy or sad dreams, whatever life brings;
Dream of a fairy, dream of a knife,
You'll dream and dream until your heart sings.

The rest is fine. Keep on writing, Ashidash...and try a short story or an article. Go for versatility and a wide range of writing. It's all good.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Sweet, youthful and filled with your heart.

[ASHIDASH]

Thanks a lot