A haunted house , a deserted friend

I got my insperation for this from the photo I saw on google. Please point out any mistakes and what you think!

A haunted house , a deserted friend,

 

I was once a place of warmth , now my coals are never lit,

 

I held my self with great pride, now I lean towards the wind,

 

I once held laughter , now my voice creaks with age,

 

The birds that once littered my window sills, now they live in my rafters

 

I once held life ,now I hold those who have long past,

 

I once woke to the rooster song, now wake to the lonly howl of the wind,

 

I once sat apon a thriving farm, now I sit in a lonely field,

 

My beds where the roses once laid are black and frozen in time,

 

The moss slowly creeps around me,threatening to blind me,

But I am not dead,

I still wait for a family to call me home again...

Reviews

[Uroš D. Stojanov..]

It's funny... I do the same thing as you. When I get inspired to write a poem about something, I ALWAYS find a picture that would help me write it, and I always use it as the cover of my poem.... as for this one, it's pretty good, I loved the image and it really did resemble the picture you found. Great stuff...

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you. :)

[ThomasJay]

feel as if my ability to think this morning has been impaired because I am just looking at the screen going "Huh..."
I understand the poem (a*s much as one that did not write it can), and I liked it. It just hit something more inside and i can not figure that out.... maybe it is the one about fate catching up to me.....
Ether way you have provoked deep thought. Thank you.

[AWickedMoon]

Haha. I missed this comment! So I shall say. "a*s much"?

[ThomasJay]

as*

[robing123456]

very good. very sad.

[AWickedMoon]

Thank you! (a bit delayed hehe)

[Lost in Wonderland]

Wow what an interesting and dark poem. I love how you have the house a soul, emotions. Haunting piece filled with sorrow, nostalgia and a bit of sad hope. Wonderful job

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou! I'm glad you like it.

[Lost in Wonderland]

No problem:)

[InkAngelXIII]

Interesting, lines 1, 2, 5, and 10 don't have any punctuation. I don't if this was on purpose or not, but hey doesn't hurt to know. Very good otherwise. I like it!

[AWickedMoon]

Hey I think I fixed them let me know!. Also thankyou!

[InkAngelXIII]

Yeah I think you got them all. Your welcome!

[Rob Santana]

You have a unique way of writing, I like it.

[AWickedMoon]

Thankyou! I checked out some of your stuff too, looking forward to reading more!