Impact

Who wants another love poem?!?

The sunset wraps the world in beauty… 

 

Lies don’t have to make

me love you

for there is no

solution

for the mystery

that makes me desire

 

to fade away,

and meet you in a world

only for us...  

 

Where I can find out

what makes you 

the one that

rules my dreams

and holds my wishes. 

 

I wait to welcome

seventeen hundred

knives inside me

 

just to be with you.

 

 

Reviews

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Yes, I would say that 1700 knives would be a very big impact, but if the first one hits its mark the others would not be felt. But I must say that it is a impact for sure. Good Job

[Fran Marie]

Impact, aptly titled I should say, 1700 hundred knives,would be a deep impact

to be sure, a dramactic and detailed piece of what one is willing to go thru~

the desire of love's passion, the cost dearly~Great WritE!!~Fran Marie

[Winter McPherson]

Very lovely! Actually, I rarely read love poems anymore...
Oh, to be 18 again and to feel this much abandonment of "in-loveness"! Cherish it while you can.
I found the 1700 knives line to be a little offbeat from the rest of the poem but it made me chuckle. :)
Good job!

[Seriana]

OMWord...the last line says it all for me. This rocks! I love it. I still don't think 1700 knives would be enough, when you want like that. Definitely a SERIOUS "impact" this desire does have. Nice write. :)

[Pax Analog]

Wow! Sudden martyrdom of an assistant to a 1700-armed knife-thrower gone horribly awry! An impressive romantic fearlessness. No solution to the mystery of such edgy love-desire. Heroically beautiful.

[Larissa G.]

Wow. Definitely not flashy, much more dark and cryptic-like for a love poem. I don't quite know how to give critique for this, with its powerful ending. It felt a tad bit choppy, but that's easy enough to smooth out.
Wow.

[Angelic Darkness]

A tragedy of love, and what we will do to have it. To some
it can be a obsession. AD

[No]

wonderful love poem.
it's not as flashy, and open as some, but it portrays a message that many people find themselves thinking but are unable to convey through written words.
thank you for sharing this.
favorite line:
"Lies don't have to make
me love you "