Visions Unbeholden

 

Lips push together -

Smiling, pouting,

Blowing kisses

From far away

 

On uncertain winds

They reach me

In so short a time

As to be immediate

 

My body sighs

Against your lips

That have never touched

My skin at all

 

The vision of the eye

Pales to that inside.

Within the mind,

All senses are one.

Reviews

[Travis Lawrence]

I like this, it's to the point and relatable, and the last two stanzas are really strong, a nice dreamy finish but still there is that sense of longing. Maybe it's too brief? Then again, maybe not. I can't decide.

[Tenten]

its a quiet beauty, private passion, i like this the slow flow and love.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is a bittersweet poem to me .. i like the way you write it .. it is short yet says so very much ..
i enjoyed it..

Chloe
xoxo

[Nely Amorim]

Thank you so much for entering my contest.. sadly I didn't have enough awards to go around :( but i hope u accept my gift xxx