Devotion...

In sun's bright rays,
                          In tides of sea,
In earth's courtyard,
                           In egoistic sky...
Where ever i see, where ever i go,
My eyes keep looking for you,
They are thirsty, they are crazy just for one glimpse of yours.
                
                           Tides of emotion in my heart,
                         never let me rest.
Even the great rescuer 'Death' can't cure me,
For there is cure for every sickness, but no cure for hunger of love.
                  
                      Trust me, for my love is true,
                     love me, for this is the only cure,
                     kill me, for it will be an honor for me.
Come near! hold me in your arms,
let me fall to pieces in them,
those never ending tides in me can be soothed in them,
You are my only cure!
Come to me, if not forever... then just for a while,
feel my heart beats that beats just for you,
see my shimmering blood flowing out just for you,
pleading for your love, pleading for your stay...
Feel the pain in this plea!!
                    Look at me, just for a while,
            See my soul dancing like insane on the tunes of your love's soothing music,
My only home, is your heart,
                    I am your devotee and you are my God!! 

Reviews

[Nayan]

I can only think of Tagore as I read through the lines of your poem - such a marvel! A truly Brahma Music/Poem as it seems to me...

[JC]

fiery and strong, courageous and bared.

[Khaaki]

wonderful poem... the last verse describes the highest model of devotion ... i love it

[Blackcat]

i love your writing style! feelings are so wonderfully described here... a lover convincing her beloved to stay even if it's for a short while. the words chosen to describe her feelings are so powerful... simple yet leaves an everlasting impact on readers... Great job Mystic:) well done!

[heart_breaker]

desperation and pain of a lover who wants her love to stay is apparent from the poem.... great write!!

[Dead_End]

plight of a lover is well described through this poem... I liked this whole poem.... shimmering blood... dancing soul... love's soothing music... and the very starting of the poem.... it's all really good! great job

[Mystic]

nice poem! i loved the following line" even the great rescuer death cannot cure me" and the last line.... the images in the poem are really good... i like the title you chose for this poem... good write!!

[HisDark Angel4ever<3]

wow i love this it so beatiful