The Requiem of a Dancer

A dancer and her counterpart

Her dance is like a graceful doe,

As twirling strings fly further

over the encompass of her silk.

A misshapen steps shows the slight demeanour in her balance

Its callous correction extinct now.

It all ends with leading turns;

Subtle bows flourished amongst

The wavering ribbon.

As finally, quickly, she places her body

in the dancing hands

that now surround her.

All done, no more, and now

it’s time to relinquish all

Evidence of my being here;

Only a memory keeps to remain.

A misshapen steps flicks me

fault-fully across the floor

The callous correction clumsy.

Twirling strings tangle round

the brashness of my crumpled dress,

Stunting with my movement.

My dance will forever be like a newborn deer.

Her dance was like a graceful doe.  

Reviews

[Mary]

I like this. The dance continues to the end- eternal newborn deer watching graceful doe. Your rhythm and imagery are wonderful!

[Wendy Seames Garner]

Very descriptive, you can feel the yearning to be like that graceful dancer. Nice writing, Archia.

[Treo LeGigeo]

I love the flow here, and the description was just lovely. Very nice.

[AK]

Wow! So well described. The grace can be felt by the reader. Great job!
P.S:(why do I feel I've already read and reviewed this poem?)

[LeeLee Ryder]

This poem dramatically illustrates how a dancer's life of hard training
can last but a brief time. There's some nice imagery throughout ....
I like how you used the similar terminology to describe the dancer and
her counterpoint .... My favorite phrase is:'twirling strings tangle round
the brashness of my crumpled dress' ... There's a few simple things you might
want to check - make steps singular or the verb singular ....
The phrase: 'Only a memory keeps to remain.' is a little tricky .... Overall
this poem is top notch ... Kudos, Archia!