You're In The Stars

You're In The Stars

A Poem by Amanda Patschke
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The song of a damsel whose true love was killed fighting a monster and immortalized in the stars for his past heroic deeds. Taking responsibility for his death, she seeks to bring him back to life.

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Verse 1

Since I lost you

I’ve forgotten

Everything you were

But I have to

Wonder within

If there’s still a cure.

 

Verse 2 

How can love be

Everlasting

If I’m without you?

Taken from me

There is nothing

To carry me through.

 

Chorus 

I can see you looking down at me,

You’re figure shining brightly in the stars.

Please return to earth and set me free

Or give me a sign so I can heal these scars.

 

Bridge 

Can I still save you?

Should I even try?

Are you worth fighting for?

Now what will I do

If I don’t know why

I even failed before?

 

Verse 3 

I suppose now

I’ll keep searching

Until I can know

How to allow

My own loving

Heart to let you go.

 


© 2014 Amanda Patschke



Author's Note

Amanda Patschke
What do you take the feelings expressed in these lyrics to mean? What kind of music would bring them to life? How does the background of Greek mythology change the song's interpretation?

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It reads very well, as I was humming it while reading I felt the feelings that the speaker felt... Such sweet and touching work... Perfectly balanced word choices...

Sincerely
Dhiman

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow!! That is amazing. The chorus is beautul. It has feeling of a great and profund loss.

The Title is what caught my eye. :)

Looking foward to reading more.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

brillant so much feeling. can i hear the song somewhere with the music


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amanda Patschke

3 Years Ago

The song will be up in a few minutes at https://www.youtube.com/channel/UC7R1Kmm-LeZTPMyukL6E2og .
Amanda Patschke

3 Years Ago

Here is the direct link to the video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sDirEjZQGw8&feature=youtu.be
The last verse is culminates the rest very well. Great flow!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A touching and relaxed piece, well done.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I see pain through the waning strength of a woman. If a Greek foreshadowing were involved I sense a wife waiting for her long lost husband to come home from battle.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the rhyming technique you used. To me, the first two verses sound like the speaker is mourning a breakup while the chorus, bridge, and verse three sound more like she's mourning the passing of a loved one.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I’ll keep searching

Until I can know

How to allow

My own loving

Heart to let you go.
This is some beautiful write...:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Are you worth fighting for?"

A question which I needed to read today.

I really enjoyed this poem, every line spoke to me.. it's timeless and well crafted.
Emotions well expressed!




Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good lyrics.
Fits well and has a clear message.
Would love to hear it sung with some music.
I got a question for you >.< If you could have someone or someones play it for ya who would it be?
I guess i'm just curious on what style you would make it out to be.
Nice write >.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Tags: lyrics, love, romance, fantasy, poem, myth

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Amanda Patschke

Pearland, TX



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