The dance.

Holding on to your seats, you about to get a dance of a lifetime.

The smell of sex, sweat, and alcohol

Music blasting makes bodies moving

Swaying to the beat, my heart pounding

Feels of escape and pleasure.

Hands reaching for the sky

just to slowly fall and little touch

down my skin.

The music is the pleasure, the organism
 
My body is ready to be taking over and just

feel of the high.

Close skins rubs against skin

Bodies moving and swaying

Close to close, sweat mixing

with sweat.

All ready for the climax, the release

to send are bodies on overload.
 
The music pounding us to move

the bodies fast and hard, Sending

the sound waves and vibrations around us and

Thought us, Taking are bodies over the edge.

Feel of complete release, escape, and pleasure.

 
 

Author's Note

please tell me what you think? please ignore all grammars, spelling, i will fix those later.

Reviews

[Althelia Marie Caine]

After reading this I closed my eyes and tried to picture this scene. I do that a lot with poetry that I read. I get a better feel for it that way. I could imagine the beating music, the bodies writhing and twisting on the dance floor. I could imagine the scent of pheromones and sweat surrounding.
Very good poem :) Save for the spelling errors and grammar.

[Maria]

the first and last line are great starters and enders, and i like how the phrase continues to the next line sometimes

[Shay]

well described, makes more interesting to read

[Coyote Poetry]

Good description in the poem. Create a orgy of thoughts. Allowed the reader to fall in the emotion and the desire of this poem. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[B-poet]

Very vivid and interesting. I like how you mix the effects of partying and alcohol with the indulgence of pleasure. Nice work. :)

[Marissa]

this is very different...and yes very descriptive.

[Annabelle Lee]

very.... descriptive

[Morrigan Nicole]

You had me from the first sentence! I liked it a lot! Really captures the reader attention.

[MOON]

Conveyed the frenzy of the dance well.

[Jazique]

Interesting (Reminds me of the title Dirty Dancing the movie) I loved the ending line Feel of complete release, escape, and pleasure. Well done.