A Raven's Song

The poem, I feel, explains itself.

Beautifully majestic,

yet sad in so many ways.

A beautiful black raven

stuck inside a steel cage.

With no one left to free it,

it sings a mournful song.

A melody so sad

you cry all day long.

The raven's song speaks to me,

in words only my heart understands.

It sings of the hurt and abandonment

of one lonely man.

When the raven's mournful

tune is done, I wipe the tears from my eyes.

Their color matches how I feel inside.

Oh, beautiful raven

with your majestic song.

Mournful, yet beautiful,

singing all day long.

How is it, you know

my heart's pain?

Could it be,

my spirit is you?

Trapped,

within a man made cage.

©1-10-15 By Ashley Nicole Nordyke

Reviews

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

this had many layers for me..first I thought about Edgar Allan Poe's poem The Raven. I was raised in Baltimore so of course the Baltimore Ravens also came to mind. Now to the poem. This was a well crafted piece with dark hues of pain and sadness. the last six stanzas connected everything sew well. SEW for emphasis purely intentional. great job with this piece

[andrew mitchell]

I immediately thought of Alan Parsons Project "The Raven" song A fav of mine. Based on Poe's work THE RAVEN. Thumbs up on this one And I like Ravens ever since. If you get time listen to it and tell me what you think!

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

I will definitely look it up Andrew. Thanks for the review. This is one of my favorite pieces!

[~]

Ashley, you have captured a lot of questions that spring from souls that want freedom in being who they are. The metaphor of the cage fits perfectly with the message of the poem.

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you. This has to be, by far, one of my favorite pieces!

[nazia]

This is something so captivating that it kept me thinking even after I read it.. Its like I have read this poen three times now.. Great work Ashley :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you so much! Your words greatly humble me!

[Jamie]

Great piece of work! Really like the style and flow of this :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you very much!

[Jamie]

You're welcome :) Feel free to review my stuff :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Will do!!!

[Demii]

This is beautiful ! I love the story it tells and how it rhymes so perfectly, well done :) I really like this !

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank you very much. I'm a big fan of Poe and always wanted to write something as wonderful as his Raven... This was the outcome!

[Demii]

Well you did a really good job, I enjoyed it ! Read some of mine if you would like :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

I definitely will! On my way to do so!

[Satan]

This one really speaks to me, I love it :)

[♥ Ari Skye ♥]

Thank You!!!