Le Danse de fleurs et vent

The night time dance of the flowers

Slowly, darkness comes

Descends upon the garden

Upon the flowers

 

Whilst the humans sleep

Creatures of the dark gather

Waiting for a show

 

Suddenly... the wind

It was so silent... so still

Now it starts to dance

 

It dances foward

Towards the quiet garden

It holds out its hand

 

The flowers take it

They grasp the wind's cold, dry hand

And they start to dance

 

They twirl and they waltz

They spin and twist and they flip

And it's beautiful

 

The bold colours swirl

The petals are a-swaying

Hues dance daringly

 

And the creatures join

They dance to the wind's music

They are amazing

 

A light, from the house

The wind dies, the music gone

Animals run home

 

Le Danse de fleurs et vent

il finit

It ends

Author's Note

Note that the title is french, the poem english but the structure in haiku form.

Reviews

[Tracie D'Angelo]

Very cool! I really like this. It's so Midsummer's Night Dream. I've never seen a multi-stanza haiku, but I like it. I always thought haikus were too short anyway.

[bluessadmood]

this was very nice..kind of dreamy..
when humans moves died away and it faded..some other lives started and got active
in the dark where all is clear and calm..its like a new party to begin
the wind started it with a whistle and extended hands offering to dance
and it was taken and all engaged in a twirl and waltz..beautiful moves
all creatures joined in a wild frenzy moves,and music just got louder and louder
they were so immersed in their joy ,only a bright light cut their dark romantic escapade..
and all started to fly..time is out for us..
very dreamy and lovely write..shows what goes on under the wings of darkness
lovely write..

[mischeif]

It really paints a picture in your head Great job keep going

[Taylor H.]

great poem. I loved it

[Michael X]

the vision behind the wording is a picturesque, colorful enchantment of a forest garden where dreams happen, the lighthearted theme brings this
intentfully well written work of art to life. great job.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Great poem here

[Havatara]

I loved it. It was sort of confusing the first time I read it, but the second time I read it all the way through I really enjoyed it. Very well done and I can't wait to read more of your work.