Pull The Trigger

I've been screaming for hours.

Isn't there anyone around to hear me?

I know I'm not alone.

I hear voices in the other room.

Why can't they hear me?

Why won't they hear me?

Why won't they come see what's wrong?

Why won't they come and help?

Is it something I've done?

What could I've done?

Is it something I've said?

What could I've said?

All I asked for was a little help;

Someone to hold.

Someone to hold me back.

Someone to notice me

Someone to acknowledge that I'm alive.

But they refuse to hear my cries.

My screams that show that I'm alive.

That I'm becoming close to doing nothing

but

pull the trigger.

Reviews

[kannerjay]

Holy... This very moving. It seems full of.... Confusion and abandon. I love how its not hateful, thrown at attacker like "You're terrible for abusing me like this!" But rather blaming the self for not doing well enough. Very realistic. I absolutely adore it. It speaks to me.

[Erika Jones]

Thank you... and I am so sorry for not saying much more than that, I get so flustered and nervous when I get reviews like this on my work. Well, beside that I'm glad you like this poem. I hope you like my other stuff I've written too, though I don't think they are any good :(

[kannerjay]

I only found it because it did well in a contest we both entered. Still, if its as quality as this, I'm sure your other works are good. I will look some other time

[Tattered Teddy]

A poem definitely does not have to rhyme and in fact sometimes the meaning and emotions are lost when the poet feels compelled to do so. This was great, I have felt this way so many times myself.

[Erika Jones]

Thanks for your review! I have also been this close to the end myself. But, I decided to write it instead of acting it. And I'm not great at rhyming poetry, not yet anyway.

[Erika Jones]

@ Max: I know what you mean by OCD! It's always nagging and nagging! But my OCD is that I have to have a sepparate notebook for each story/book/poems and in each of those notebooks it has to be written with the same exact pen I started with or I don't find what I'm writing worth writing. Stupid?

[Max]

not really. for me poems just have to rhyme. otherwise i dont like them. i wasnt saying that poems that dont rhyme cant be good. but for me if they dont have good rhyming then i dont really likethem.

[Max]

its good, but it doesnt rhyme. that doesnt matter, but its an ocd thing for me, poems have to rhyme