Porcelain and I

Finding out you have been betrayed.

 

Beads of sweat POPPED glistening
In radiance, dampness clung,
Sheen of soiled perspiration
Like dark skies blanket, mourning.
Giddy head sways in waves of foreboding,
Weighty vice crushing skull bones
SNAP
Splinters sharply cradle of mind
Dumb founded in denial, rumbled.

Grumbling of depths within, groaning
Straining, bony frame collapsing
On knees scarred to rest, across
Porcelain cold, grip knuckles
CRACK
Heaving contents of a love known
SPLATtering, smashing, slicing
Through still, tainted water,
SLAMS hitting all sides, speckles.
No pretty colours gather,
Slides in death descent down,
Wallowing in self pity sinks.
Betrayal of a water bowl
All those floating dreams.
Just goes to show nothing is real

Once rich, digested deep, now
Rests swimming at the
Bottom of white, mingling
With nurture spent, all goodness
Spewed forth, flushed out in descent,
To sewer of stale foul content,
While breaking heart sighs
At life’s little event,
SOBS
Something so whole now lies
SMASHED
In the bottom of a white bowl, exorcising,
Relieving fear, pain, sorrow, all crushing
Deceit, departed stomach empty,
All is empty.
As dreams come to a close.

© 2007 Bubo

Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Bubo, this is woinderful writing. Like Blackbirdsong says it's a tragic beauty of a poem.
A good way to release and you do it so well.
I have always thought that depression and broken hearts make for good poetry, this is unfortunate.


Grumbling od depths within, groaning
Straining, bony frame collapsing
On knees scarred to rest, across
Porcelain cold, grip knuckles
CRACK
Heaving contents of a love known
SPLATtering, smashing, slicing
Through still, tainted water,
SLAMS hitting all sides, speckles.

Powerful!

Love the poem but not the pain that manifested this.

Peace

[Charles Booher]

you convey emotion wonderfully, and i love the bolded words. as others probbaly know, things like that are things i look for and enjoy (although i myself never use that approach i very much applaud it!) excellent job, Bubo!

[Watson Trippy]

Oh wow.So much pain and heartbreak.You describe it so well with the wonderful imagery and i can picture it perfectly.Absolutely wonderful read.It's writing like yours that makes me like to read.Beautiful job.

[Adam Greenfield]

"Something so whole now lies
SMASHED
In the bottom of a white bowl"

Purging. Great description. In fact, the whole thing is full of wonderful descriptions.

"All is empty.
As dreams come to a close."

I completely feel this right now.

[Erotic Goddess]

All is empty.
As dreams come to a close.

Wonderful ending my dear. I absolutely adore the way that you write. You are incredible. Thank you for sharing this. I have been so behind, I am sorry it took me so long. I am getting caught up though!

[Swooping Eagle]

Love the humor of this piece. that is, sick humor (with pun fully intended). Great writers, in my not so humble opinion, can find writibility everywhere, and anywhere, which is what you definitely did here!

[Paul McCracken]

Neat-o!!

[Madonna Starr]

Ah ha! I get it!
I'm a genius!!! Ha Ha..
But seriously this was amazing..
I was thinking that at first this was going to be something
beautiful and while the details are incredible descriptive
they're also a little unsettling on the stomach!
Great work Bubo!!

[Racheal]

Nice use of imagery and words to convey such a distasteful vision to the reader. You probably ought to include a warning to the reader to use soem dramamine or to not read it on a full stomach. Ick. But it was beautifully down and i could really see it all happening in my minds eye and it evoked the memories of events that happened after some parties i have been too.

[Kevin Connolly]

"I'm gonna wash that man right out of my hair," as the old song goes. You've taken it to brand new heights (or depths), cleansing your whole body in the porcelain loo...Brilliant poetry, Deni. Favourite.

[Lol!!]

Very moving! Awesome work. Love the way you brought this experience into poetry!

Great work yet again!! Keep it up.