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A Poem by ChemicalMadness

even then
     we knew
only stiff winds     
     and broken threads     
     could inform our
hopeless hands
     shaping what should,
     holding loose
               what was left over

they told us
     summer winds     
          could hope...
     hot urging breath
          from nowhere,
necessary as the 
          drumbeat of our

but my breeze      
     was never meant
     to melt
               your ice fever
      or flush the stoicism      
               from the glacial veins
of your sometimes

© 2015 ChemicalMadness

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I think I like this one even better - the format messes with me a bit, but because of the short lines, it's easy to maintain the rhythm in my head. I love the way you chose your modifiers "hopeless hands" "sometimes heart" brilliant!

Posted 3 Years Ago

I like this even though it is going to take a while for my poor mind to develop the muli layered story behind this beautiful and yet strong write.

Posted 3 Years Ago

0 of 8 people found this review constructive.

great metaphor used here to show one trying to melt another's heart...how hard that can be sometimes.
our blood rushes, theirs stays in one place, maybe because of the past...

but if we keep urging, we may sooner or later achieve that melting.

Posted 3 Years Ago

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Added on January 9, 2015
Last Updated on January 9, 2015



Hopefully you find something in some of my words here...If not, there is beauty in the music (which is not mine, clearly). Listen....always listen. more..