Empty Hole

Empty Hole

A Poem by FrikinFrancesca
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I heard a song and it made sense to me, it really hit home and this poem and focused around how I feel about certain things along with the emotion of the song.

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My heart isn't here anymore.
Can you see the hole in my chest?
The place where something should be.

I think it shattered,
I think it broke.
Maybe it disappeared,
If you choose to peer,
You'll see the reasons why.

Something happened,
Something you can't erase
or forget.
This unforgettable memory, fresh in my mind.
It caused the collapse.
It's what caused the void.
Do you see it now?
The reasons behind it?
I'm fueled by what it use to be,
Now it's gone, empty and abandoned.

Can you feel my heart beating?
Can you feel my pulse?
No, you can't.
It's obvious isn't it?
You took the missing piece with you.
The thing that will complete the hole in my chest.
I wonder if I'll ever feel that warm feeling again.
It's to late though.
My hearts not beating.
It's not even there no more.
It dried out.
It died.

© 2009 FrikinFrancesca



Author's Note

FrikinFrancesca
Ignore grammar problems. :l
Also, if it doesn't sound very good, I kind of rushed through it, so sorry.

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You can definitely tell this poem was based around a song. The rhythm and pace of it almost makes the poem seems like lyrics.

Brilliant imagery and emotion runs through this piece-you should be proud of it. Anyone who has suffered a broken heart can relate, and it's always good for poetry to be able to reach other people and grab their attention and emotions. You've definitely done it with this piece; thoroughly enjoyed it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Hey! Your poem is indeed dark and sad. Even so, it is brimming with meaning and power. The description is great. It is a beautiful piece with a lot of grief and emptiness that rings from each word...

Liked it a lot! Thanks for sharing! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Really poignant, and heartfelt. Fantastic poem! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Very descriptive and meaningful poem :) It also reminds me that there is only One who can truly fill the hole in our lives :) Great job, keep up the good work :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


i liked the progression of the in the whole... It's a good work still ignoring the grammaticals, which can't get ignored. May i point out the spelling mistakes since you didn't to forbid for those.............just joking....

Posted 3 Years Ago


this piece definitely reminds me of lyrics, I actually really enjoyed it, it conveys all of the emotions of a heartbreak to me. I love it. kep writing

Posted 4 Years Ago


I like the way you have written and shown the pain through ur writing. Keep writing :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


I really like it! I think we've all been in this position, and you did a great job of putting into writing something we have all experienced!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


wow very deep! can really feel the pain, sadness and hurt through your word choice! so vivid! great poem!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

As long as we live, love will always be the principle of existence. It does not die darling, just having rest.

And when it beats again, you will still agree with me that "it is always nice to be in love".

Posted 5 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

yash

3 Years Ago

Your words are so positive!!
LoveDens

3 Years Ago

Yes. Thank you for that. I guess negative words or even just thoughts will never bring any good.
yash

3 Years Ago

and there you go again..
This is very emotional, and very powerful. The way you wrote this really pulled me in an made me feel the emotion behind every word. This is also a piece I'm sure many people can relate to, because many have felt like this at some point in their life

Posted 5 Years Ago



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Added on December 22, 2009
Last Updated on December 23, 2009
Tags: Empty, Hole, Personal, Poem, Poetry, Music, Love, Heart broken, People, Dark
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