When I Speak of Pain

When I Speak of Pain

A Poem by William Liston
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The title describes it

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My heart is torn ...
An art is born ...
The black ink boiling in my pen
shall speak of times
when weakened minds
endure the pains of life again.

Oh hear the mourn
~ each burden worn
ignites a flare within my soul.
My vision's blurred ...
each tear obscured 
the happiness of life in whole.

Evoked from pain
and joys that wane,
desires scream a cry unheard
to give this tale,
so those in hell
can see a tear behind each word.


© 2017 William Liston



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William Liston
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Outstanding piece ! There is life in this write and one is forced( positively) to feel the emotions behind. When I speak of pain-. A very apt title to this piece. I also find a sublime link of your poem -pain and pen in this write.
Wanting to be heard, a desire to let out those painful emotions and what not. When in pain, everything seems dim and lifeless, and tears become reality of our existence. Wonderful write and all the three stanzas are equally emoting.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

9 Months Ago

You're right. This poem and "Pain and a Pen" are very similar, both structurally and thematically. I.. read more
Gorthi Manasvini

9 Months Ago

My pleasure :-)



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Outstanding piece ! There is life in this write and one is forced( positively) to feel the emotions behind. When I speak of pain-. A very apt title to this piece. I also find a sublime link of your poem -pain and pen in this write.
Wanting to be heard, a desire to let out those painful emotions and what not. When in pain, everything seems dim and lifeless, and tears become reality of our existence. Wonderful write and all the three stanzas are equally emoting.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

9 Months Ago

You're right. This poem and "Pain and a Pen" are very similar, both structurally and thematically. I.. read more
Gorthi Manasvini

9 Months Ago

My pleasure :-)
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This is fantastic. Every line, stanza, vernacular, syntax, and emotional integrity makes this a wonderful piece.

I can definitely see why you've chosen this as your highlight.

Wonderful job; no qualms with anything.

Beautifully composed lines, after beautifully composed lines; beautifully composed stanza after beautifully composed stanza.

The imagery was wild and vivid within my mind, especially "the black in boiling within my pen" as I have a fountain pen that one can actually see the ink.

Just wow,

A great peice and nice, heavy typography to match.

Much love,

LR

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

11 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words. Now that I think of it, the "black ink boiling" line is kinda ironic .. read more
The second stanza was a little less impactful for me. Here's why I think so, I thought this line was a bit cliche, "awakens from my battered soul." This seemed a little vague, but maybe it was meant to be that way, "the happiness of life in whole" I say this because the poem spends the majority talking about pain and the writer, so happiness at the last line felt kinda thrown in there. I guess I would like to hear more about the joy that comes through that pain because of creation or release.

But other wise, definitely had great flow to it. I loved reading the rhythm of the lines. Favorite line, "The black ink boiling in my pen" because boiling makes me think of fire and heat. Fire and heat also makes me think of creation like the crafting of swords.

I also love the topic of poetry and what it does for the writer. Pain is an emotion that births truths of life.

Interesting write.

Thanks for sharing! Have a great day!

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

12 Months Ago

Thank you for your constructive review, Jazz. You've given me some excellent pointers on this piece... read more
Livana Lowell

12 Months Ago

Ahh, okay I read that wrong. And I like the "ignites a flare within my soul." I think it makes the p.. read more
Beautiful in rhyme and flow.
Shelly has said : "Our sweetest songs are those that tell of saddest thought"
Need I say more?

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

1 Year Ago

You need not say more, Shabeeh. Shelly's quote sums it up well. Thank you for your review.
This is literally one of my favorites. I find it so therapeutic to write and edit. I've recently been reading over my first stories and poems and it has been nostalgic in some ways. There was once a time when my anxiety didn't effect me as much.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

1 Year Ago

It is therapeutic to write and edit. It's good to look back on older pieces and see how much we've g.. read more
You have quite amazing vocabulary and power for one so young and this is an extremely accomplished poem.

Beccy.

PS. Dunbar is a favourite of mine, in particular I adore 'we wear the mask.'

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

1 Year Ago

I'm glad we share similar poetic tastes. Thank you for your kind words.
intensely conveyed !
the way you've described is flawless !!
keep writing :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much.
This is truly a beautiful piece of literature. You are what they call a born writer. To me the poem is saying that your inspiration for writing comes from the pains that you have had to endure throughout their life and that their purpose is so that way others who may be in pain can find solace in your words. (That's what I got out of it.) Anyway, great job and I'm looking forward to reading and reviewing more of your works. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

1 Year Ago

Your interpretation was exactly what I was going for. Thank you for your kind words.
Asir Y.R

1 Year Ago

You're very welcome and thank you for sharing this.
I really enjoyed this great job

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Rebecca. I'm glad you enjoyed.
Rebecca Garber

1 Year Ago

No thank u for creating it
We so often in writing of pain do as you express in your words; we release it, and in doing so perhaps shall help another who struggles understand and perhaps deal better with the pain they experience.
I, as you know that writing is a positive way to deal with the hurt inside, the hurt outside, and all that comes in-between as so many others also have learned.
Write on...........let the ink in your pen flow! I note you are influenced by the words of Poe; perhaps you shall be as he and inspire another to understand why they are in such agony!
Excellent rhyming with a lasting message deserves a good rating!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

1 Year Ago

I agree with your words. Poetry has been a cathartic experience for me. It has helped me release sor.. read more

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Get your own valid XHTML YouTube embed code I'm an amateur poet who's been writing for about three and a half years. Some of my influences include Edgar Alla.. more..

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