A Lovely Kiss

My 2nd romantic poem.......sort of :P

Oh what a lovely kiss
how much do I miss
when we're not together
I miss you like the weather
when Spring doesn't come
We're stuck with s****y winter
I'd rather get a splinter
than deal with another blizzard
My love for you is intense
I can't take your absence
It's hard to practice abstinence
We should be making babies
Instead of dealing with rabies
My love is sincere
Please come back my dear
When you are not here
I watch You Tube clips
and stare at Shakira's hips
I'll promise to behave
I'll even start to shave
I'll be your slave
to love you forever
and I will never ever
put video games over you again
oh what a lovely kiss
now we are in eternal bliss

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

This is so nice ,kind of funny too..
i know she will always come first ,but could you keep that promise
to stay away from video games and watching Shakira s hips..ha ha
and to behave ,shave and be a slave..too much to ask,but she must be worth it
wont be that easy..ha ha
this was really nice to read
lovely write

[Adela Muresan]

:"> aww
that was so cute

[Patrica Alvarez]

lol, video games. I like it, it is both funny and sweet :)

[Brette Medb]

Haha... Somehow I doubt you will keep to all those promises but it is the trying that's worth it more than the promise :)

[Angelheaded Hipster]

I dont know if I would be willing to give up everything for a kiss...for love. Love is fleeting, and like someone once told me, its more spiritual than physical, and I can see where hes coming from.
If you do decide to behave, let me know how that works out...*L*

[Ella Emergency]

This was... much better! Aside from the making babies part. Kids are a waste of f*****g time.

Just saying

[Breezie Kae]

A beautiful love poem that isn't just a bunch of cliche stuff. It feels genuine.

[Lauren Beth]

Nice and really heartfelt piece...very real. I can feel the love!

[Gandré]

I liked the part with Shakira hips... so good to read something like this from you. Lovely write, yes. Bluessadmood said it.. and I repeat it.

[misha]

Great job

[Ama May Cooper]

This is a realy romantic and sensative piece. my only complaint is that the rhyming is very muched forced sometimes loosing its effect due to looking for a sutible word which takes away from teh story.

But otherwise the tale is clear and understandable the longing to kiss once more the lover who has it seems walked away is clear and the description of that longing beautiful x