To Remind

To Remind

A Poem by Cyprian Van Dyke
"

A bird in the tree is worth two in the sky/a leafless tree that holds nothing but a feather

"

Your hair is like a pair of wings blowing in the wind,

Sharing this moment with a bald headed man like me.

You could have been anywhere you wanted,

But you responded to me.

You left the defenseless sky to be in the arms of a tree,

That’s rooted by the ocean.

As the wind picks up, like a wave out the sky,

You try to hold onto my arm, instead of fly.

It means so much to me to know you don’t want to leave my side.  

But as the sunset’s and every brush of wind paints the sky,

I know you must fly, high, like the ocean waves, kicking back the tide.

No words could be said, not even goodbye.

And though I’d give all the green I have to have you by my side,

I will forever hold this feather of yours that you left behind, to remain, to remind.   

11/13.16

© 2016 Cyprian Van Dyke



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Cyprian Van Dyke
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very sweet. i like the 'to remain to remind' piece. :)

Posted 7 Months Ago


Cyprian Van Dyke

7 Months Ago

Thank you very much :)
Amazing ... love your description of separation .....you could have been any where you wanted, but you responded to me...powerful pull on emotion.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Cyprian Van Dyke

8 Months Ago

Thank you, very. I'm happy to read you liked it and that it pulled you in. :)
Hebe

8 Months Ago

Always welcome :)
I liked and I understood this poem.
"I know you must fly, high, like the ocean waves, kicking back the tide.
No words could be said, not even goodbye."
Somethings cannot be held or be still. Need to know the freedom of open sky and open road. Thank you Cyprian for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Months Ago


Cyprian Van Dyke

8 Months Ago

Thank you, Coyote, very!
Coyote Poetry

8 Months Ago

You are welcome my friend.
You try to hold onto my arm, instead of fly ..

Love this beautiful line. .

Beauty of love.. pain of letting go love has been expressed quite well :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Cyprian Van Dyke

8 Months Ago

Thank you very much!
I'm happy to read you liked it :)
Beautiful. Strong. Emotional. This poem is one of the few that really leave their mark on the reader. Keep 'em coming.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Cyprian Van Dyke

8 Months Ago

Thanks, very! It means a lot to hear that :)
Classy! I love it so much! Wonderfully written and such an amazing ride reading it!

Absolutely GREAT!

I hope all is well with you.
:-)
Sil

Posted 8 Months Ago


Cyprian Van Dyke

8 Months Ago

Thank you, very!
Sorry for the late reply, but it couldn't be helped ):
I'm okay, an.. read more
Silmara McGarry

8 Months Ago

You are welcome!
Ohh...don't worry at all.

I am good, thank you.. :-)
Cyprian Van Dyke

8 Months Ago

I'm happy to hear that. You're most welcome :)
"And though I’d give all the green I have to have you by my side"
Oh what a ravishing line, so strong and heartfelt. The imageries and metaphors makes me spell-bound. It's a very elegant poem, flowing smoothly,evoking vivid imageries and emotions. The juxtaposition in the beginning makes the other persona seems sincere and pure.
Keep writing poet. Have a good day 😊

Posted 9 Months Ago


Cyprian Van Dyke

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Atiba Sheikh, so much for your lovely review. :) You do the same, Poetess, and have a gre.. read more
"You try to hold onto my arm, instead of fly"...I really like that line. Great poem, well done.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Cyprian Van Dyke

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Dolce. :)
Well expressed!
I love the metaphors and the similes used here...


Posted 9 Months Ago


Cyprian Van Dyke

9 Months Ago

Thank you very much! :)
Tazeen Ahmed

9 Months Ago

You're very welcome!!
I like the comparison a lot in this. You're able to convey a love that is gone as a gift that was given and appreciated.

Very nice writing here. :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


Cyprian Van Dyke

9 Months Ago

Thank you! Your review is a pleasure to read. I like the way you wondered the second sentence. :)

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