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i wrote this at lunch

 

Month after months

Days after day

Minutes after minutes

Seconds after seconds

This thought is swimming

Thru her mind

She wonders why

Minutes go by

As she sits with a blank stare

“Why...”

“Why me? ...”      

Then it walks by

Her entire attention goes slowly to him

The dark memories fade in

All the good and bad things

All the smiles and tears

Have disburse to this

Her grin slowly fades

As he walks towards her

Ands says “___meet ___ my fiancée…”

Slowly a tear runs down her cheek

Her feelings have returned

The darkness within starts to come out

Her eyes turn black

Her skin goes pale

Her soul floats away

She whispers” I have to go...”

She starts to cry

She leaves her stuff and runs outside

He gives ___ as if he didn’t know what he’s done

Outside she falls to ground heart broken

It starts pouring rain

And she screams her heart out

Screaming “How could you do this to me… I loved you…”

He walks outside

He reaches to her and tells her to turn around and stand up

As she does he kisses her

He says” I thought you didn’t want me anymore, I thought you hated me, I thought you didn’t care.”

She cries out” since the day we met I loved you that could never change no matter what.”

After months

Day’s minutes

And seconds

She’s finally found happiness through the darkness

Author's Note

ignore grammar problems please! :D

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

The perspective on the piece is interesting, as it relates to the crying woman and the man - as they find happiness; but what of the fiancee? She is left, to feel pain, much in the sense the crying woman did. What are we to think of this man, that would so easily abandon the one he had asked to marry him. Had he but settled for her? Was she his second choice? The pain she suffers now, because of his actions... begs the question...

[Kira]

Hmm...Adrian has a point. I once wrote a story from the perspective of the forgotten one, the 'fiancee' as he put it. One of them will always be hurt...

Amazing.

[Fathers Philosopher]

Deep.

[Areya Valena]

This is beautiful. Such pain, and beauty in one great poem.

[Madelin]

This is good. its a story but a poem
i love it it is really unique
and i love it
great piece
=D