Proposal

This poem is an exercise in the terza rima form, and inspired by the moment when I turned the tables on my now-husband!

You drive me absolutely crazy when

we argue loudly and you always win,

and when the chores stand all forgotten. Then

 

Again, to feel your kisses on my skin

inspires crazy feelings, too. My joy,

my silly love, but where can I begin?

 

So much a man, yet still so much a boy --

you charm me with your smiles, so soft and warm;

you cheer me with the stories you deploy

 

Of navy days. But thoughts of you in harm,

like Desdemona, bring me back to tears.

Now I keep you safe inside my arms.

 

The road ahead, a future filled with fears,

seems safer when I think of you with me.

Will you complete me through the years?

 

We plan a big house nestled by the sea

with children, dogs, and grilling smells. The picture

we built with love fills us with such glee:

 

Imaginings, hopes and prospects for our future.

How exciting! Love has set me free

to open up and take my place as suitor:

 

My dearest love, will you marry me?

Reviews

[Beau Maysey]

That interesting semi-volta from the first stanza to the second I like.
I'm not sure about "crazy feelings"; that doesn't evoke a lot for me, and maybe could be said another way.
Even when you go enjambed, I'd say still capitalize the beginning letters of the stanzas.
I like the reference to Desdemona, and how your now-husband was like a child under your protection.
Awwww, stanza 5 is so sweet, although be careful not to force rhymes together.
Maybe something more descriptive than "cooking smells" should be placed; what specific smell are you going for?
In all, very good; go over it a few times and see what edits you can make to improve it. :)

[DaughterNature]

Thanks! I will definitely look at those ideas! Are you familiar with the terza rima form?

[Wuji]

I really especially enjoyed the first 2 stanzas! I like the abundance of romantic themes in your writing!

[DaughterNature]

Thank you! I guess I consider myself lucky to have an inspiring relationship!