Depression

Depression

Depressions creeping in like a fog looming over the Atlantic

Dense grey matter choking so thick there is no air

It’s in the distance but the fog horn blows, a warning

Rolling in like a freight train with no way of stopping it

There will be no way to see through it only to wave

Your hands frantically in front of you for some direction

Depression's creeping in like a fog over the Atlantic

It’s a like a car crash waiting to happen, all you can do

Is wait, buckle up hold on and deal with the aftermath.

 

Deborah Kelly (Debbie Philly) 7/14/14

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

I would say this was totally an amazing observation on the characteristics of depression, I have been there and I know how it feels... Your choice of words, expressions and presentation all are perfect to create this excellent this excellent work... The ending part has been the standing part of this poem... You have metaphorically conveyed the true pain of a depressed heart... Well done frnd...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Debbie_Philly]

WOW thank you so much Dhiman... your words mean allot... :) and yes its crippling sometimes... and you have toj ust at least write it out ... thanks again.

[Debbie_Philly]

oops typos sorry

[B-poet]

Loved the creative visualization on how you've characterized depression as an uncontrollable force. The only thing you can do when it happens is too cope with it. Great work Debbie. Loved the picture you picked out for this poem as well. A thought provoking read. :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Bpoet for coming by to read and for your very thought review it means allot !! :)

[Bluefire]

You explain depression quite well. It is exactly like all those things and more. But after it's gone, when you're truly happy and hopeful, when you decide to say, "I will not go back to that foggy pier again"
That's when you know you are stronger than the hands that choke you.
Very well done, fluent and from the heart. ^^

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Bluefire... your so right about that... thank you for reading :) I will be over to read you too. Hope all is well with you !!

[Bluefire]

You're welcome! And thank you. ^^

[Rita L. Sev]

When you know that fog is rolling in and can do nothing to stop it, that is a scary feeling. Very apt metaphor. Let's hope the grey goes away and you can enjoy this lovely mild summer we're having, Debbie!

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Rita.... Half the reason te fog is rolling in is because I have been sick with a virus for almost a month now...Not able to enjoy this beautiful summer at all :( Seeing doc again Monday. Thank you again Rita I will be over to read you my friend !!

[Ladysue]

Oh Debbie, you have penned this so creatively..terrific first line too..it set the mood perfectly for what followed...love the fog metaphor too as depression does creeps up and before you know it you are in the thick of it..excellent description.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Sue.... It means allot and yes that is how if happens huh ... xo

[Emily B]

sometimes i wonder how we ever manage to survive it . . . persistent little all consuming cuss

[Debbie_Philly]

LOL I agree Emily... seems like its a writers curse.... but the pen helps... Thank you so much !! xo

[Baby Ricochet]

I liked the fog metaphor. Good poem

[Debbie_Philly]

Hey you how are you ? Thank you very much... I appreciate the read... I'll be over to see you as well !! xo

[Daydreamer]

Perhaps when there are signs that depression is about to come about, our surroundings really start to opaque our vision to the world.... And leave us another whole mess to deal with.... Good symbolism portrayed....
When depression settles in, the normal tends to disappear away... And be replaced with sheer darkness... As you say the atmosphere was emptied of air, only fog left out to complete the scene....
and one acknowledges the responsibility of depending of himself to deal with the climax and all that follows... I'm not a fan of depression though :P, I like sadness more :P

[Debbie_Philly]

So very true Manal.... I myself turn inward and write when I feel like this. and yes Sadness is a better term... I have a few on that as well...lol Although i have many about hope... so it evens out :) Thank you again so much for reading my meanderings !! :) xo

[Daydreamer]

You're most welcome,Debbie :)
you're pretty btw xx 😃

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I know I have never experienced depression but I have to say I believe you gave a wonderfully creative view of what it must be like. People who get depressed really can't control it.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you Cowboy.... I can thanks God that it doesnt last long.... but I do know some who get it pretty bad... Thank you again... I will be over promise.. i have been sick !!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome I am bald to see you are still around in the cafe.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you... yea Im still here.. just in and out... havent been feeling well.. but I will be around to read more :)

[John Stussy]

This is an apt description of depression, I like the vast epitomization you used with the fog, and the heavy, indomitable metaphor of the freight train, both captured the helplessness one feels. The only flaw I saw was the missing apostrophe in "Depressions" at the beginning of the first and third stanza. Great work with this poem.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much John... I very much appreciate you reading and I will fix that right away !! Thanks again !!

[John Stussy]

It was my pleasure Debbie. :)