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I thought this was a great poem! It was short, sweet, and right to the point. One thing I did notice when I was reading it, was that the sentences were kind of chopy, and you don't want that in a piece like this. For example, in some sentences you used and too much, and it brought me out of the greatness of this piece. Overall, though, the piece was magnificent, the rhyming was exellent, and the simplicity of it all amazed me. With a little editing, you could be a great poet! Congratulations!
Posted 5 Months Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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