Out The Window

A poem by my 13 year old daughter Lauren. Dad's very proud.

 

Out the Window

Youth grows green and hovers,

Under a ceiling fan,

That blows the covers, and note book paper, notes of wasted ink,

Out the window…..

Blank eyes,

Blank page,

Blank mind that stares at starlit sky,

Where dreams they flit, they float, they fly….

They lie

They lie…out the window.

 

Do you see where the green hill lies?

And where the carefree children play?

          Out the window, out the window

 

Wishes are only lies that make us want it more…

Want to be seen, want to be heard, want to be loved.

Out the window!

The rose petals fly,

                   No time goes by,

                                      With tomorrow.

Where is tomorrow? I’d like to know; when is he coming?

 

Youth stops growing, clocks stop ticking, everything has stopped….except,

What’s out the window.

Full mind,

Filled page,

Eyes read no vacancy, there is a book written now,

The words are in the walls, each letter in the mirror, speech on the lips…..

Nothing said, silence.

The Cheshire cat, he taunts, he plays, from outside the window.

He asks: why do you stay, locked inside?

Eyes widen with fear or wonder and….

With one long stride…..gone…..time moves on.

I’m out the window.

 

 

 

Reviews

[FoolsGold23]

this reminded be of "through the Looking Glass" and would serve as a great opening for that story, should Carrol republish it. Indeed, I am very, very glad I read this, lovely metaphors and allusions crafted into it seamlessly. Wise beyond her years, so true, to write rhetoric like this! Masterful! Make sure she keeps writing!!!! Lovely work!

[Gabrielle]

This IS amazing! wow. I really loved it. Superb writing.

[R J Askew]

Especially like with 'one long stride...gone... time moves on' Like the gentle rhyme here and higher up with sky, fly, lie...and the use of repetition...they, they, they...blank, blank, blank...and of course...the title in the poem itself. Great stuff! Lean writing, should read really well.

[James K. Blaylock]

Stellar work, Lauren, you've a magical way with words. Keep up the splendid writes...

jkb

[Carole]

Beautiful, carefree and such a powerful message, Lauren. Well done....Carole

[Amy]

Wonderful poem! Once I started reading it I understood why you would be so proud of her. Tell her to keep up the GREAT work!

[Lezlie]

aww!!!!!!

this is good!

I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Heart Of A Wolf]

Very good. Your daughter is a very talented little girl. keep encouraging her to continue onward with her ideas and words.

[bobby]

MY dreams have come true ,as i float through windows, tommorrow is for my dreams to capture!