Roses & Time Well-Spent

Written during freshman year.

I don’t want to think about it;

I just want to feel

everything; everything and you.

I want to feel sunlight

raining down,

I want to feel roses and time well-spent.

I want to feel the touch of a butterfly

storming on a meadow.

I want bliss again,

is that too much to ask?

I want rainbows, but storm clouds

block the color out,

and bleakly you speak

of loving her.

But do you feel

everything? Everything and her?

I try to feel you but how,

when she’s wrapped all around

you and your sunlight?

I don’t want to think about the consequences,

sometimes I don’t want to feel,

I want to disregard it all

and show you that I can only feel

you.

And I wish to show you

dancing tongues and angel lips

and souls united under a canvas of

“this shouldn’t be.”

And I wish to seize the moment

and make for good time,

for forever only lasts so long

until it shrivels up

into smoke and collision

into an apocalyptic melee

of broken hearts, 

but alas;

a battle would be beautiful

if it were for the heart of you.

And dying would be beautiful

if it was in the name of love.

And love would be beautiful

if it were ever enough.

Enough to see in a reflection;

if only in your eyes.

And I wish to be held,

and to be that choice

that makes or breaks a man.

I want corruption and chaos;

but only for hearts.

I wish to fall and shatter;

not topple and break.

Topple and wobble,

out of balance, out of center

out of clear sanity,

or sane clarity.

And this - in your memory.

But could you cry out blossoms

and plant your tears?

In a bittersweet aroma

and music filling my ears.

And if you could tell me exactly

what I want to hear,

bliss and serenity,

roses and time well-spent,

or the touch of a butterfly

felt for years.

Reviews

[ComfortableLiar]

This is absolutely beautiful, I felt truly touched by every line. It almost made me cry, it sucked me in so completely and that's one of the trademarks of a great piece of work. I loved it.

Thank you for entering the contest, you're definitely a force to be reckoned with.

[Kara Emily Krantz]

what the hell... lol i can't take this anymore. i'm just on a roll of reading wonderful poetry, and they just keep getting better. this is fantastical .i'm in love.

the title is perfect. the flow is amazing. i relate to your work, and i admire your style. and this is just freakin' fantastic. i wanted to scream while reading it, because of a mixture of emotions- because it was so damn artistic i wanted to hug you, because it was thing i wanted to say and i wish i had written it. overall, flippin' fantastic.

thank you

hugs

[Cynthia Yildirim]

Very beautiful, as if from a play. I could totally see this in a romantic play. I like this piece very much. Your passion is apparent in it.

[Matt]

Wow! That's all I can say is wow! This poem absolutely touches the soul.

[Berkley Conner Jr]

powerful
"I want corruption and chaos;
but only for hearts."
truly wonderful you make this poem chaotic and well versed but you also keep the sublty that is all yours. Good job on this one. You captured your audience even if it was only me and you kept me wanting more and more until suddenly the end. You give it strength

[xXx JakBeNimble xXx]

this is wonderful...