Dry-Eyed Sorrows

Written in 8th grade.

With every time you won’t say a thing,

you leave me hanging on

by a strand of a gentle smile.

And a smile back.

A moment’s connection,

but then it all disappears

into a cold, empty mist.

And what about the connection of eyes?

Starting to see it was pretty one-sided.

And never will our hands connect,

or lips,

or hearts,

or minds,

just daydream in my mind.

And I see you are just another

never-was-and-never-will-be.

Just a little more nothingness

to pile on this nothing life.

And with another dry-eyed night,

the tears that I just cannot cry,

just like then.

What I used to envy,

but now I know:

Dry eyes are worse than tears,

just collecting the moisture

to release it later,

like a waterfall of sorrows

pouring on

the cheeks you made bright red.

Just like then.

And this isn’t about you

anymore.

Reviews

[Lindsay.]

Beautiful Breezie.

It was amazing. I love the imagry, the flow, and the poem over all.

This is def. one of my favorites. =)

[Kaden Sylvers]

wow so powerful & beautiful; strong images

[brittanyjane]

Stop thinking about how much you love him
And start thinking about how much he hurts you

Absolutely beautiful piece. I can relate so well to this. Keep up the wonderful work!

[Crazy Cat Man]

wow this is incredible. You start it off really well.

this is the most powerful line you have

''Dry eyes are worse than tears
Just collecting the moisture''

jeah when we hold it in.....it becomes poison. great job :D

[Wendy]

WOW. this is awsome. brian so naive, i read it to him and he's just like. "heh, that's good"

[Laylani Mullane]

This is a very good piece, and an awesome use of the prompt. The emotion is tangible and I like the line "Like a waterfall of sorrows/Pouring on/the cheeks you made bright red/" Very nice imagery. Congrats Breezie.

[Being.john.sweet~The Ev..]

I enjoyed this piece...one thing that kind of caught my ear is how you changed tense...from you to I...it would be a bit more cohesive if you kept on the same wavelength...thank you Breezie...peace to you~john