Don't want to let go just yet...

My attempt at Double Etheree: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1

Now

I wait

Hoping you

Still want me near

Chaos is around

That is a part of life

We seem right for each other

I am willing to take the risk

Circumstances are temporary

The obstacles seem insignificant

Its compatibility that matters

You push me away as the answer

Never having a discussion

You gave me no chance to speak

Silence is between us

Patience I must have

Quiet I stay

Wishing you

Change your

Mind

Reviews

[Jamestown]

Format is a new one for me had to take a look at some others
and by comparison you did very well! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[EileenMarie]

Thanks for the review!

[Chestlyn Draghoender]

Excellent piece of writing.

[EileenMarie]

Thank you! I appreciate you reading my poem!

[NeiL ArandA]

Amazing . Never knew such poetry writing style exist . You're very talented .

[EileenMarie]

Thank you.. I love this style myself :)

[Lydia Shutter]

The double etheree is not easy to write and you have aced it here. Very emotional and well expressed. Kudos to you. lydi**

[EileenMarie]

Thank you Lydi! I appreciate you taking the time to read my work!

[zainul]

You have done great to show the use of Double Etheree in real life situation.
An excellent piece of meaningful art.
Salute you, dear poet.:)

[EileenMarie]

Thanks Zainul!! I appreciate your review as always :)

[zainul]

You are most welcome,dear friend.:)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Yeah, Good Work. It seems that after having a discussion the character in the poem is waiting for the reaction of the other person.

[EileenMarie]

Thanks....... more of an discussion in my head of how I felt at the time

[SquinklaPsyOps]

What you could do is take him on a long ride, then tell him to get out and check the tires because it sounds like a flat and leave him there on the road by himself.

[EileenMarie]

Lol...

[SyberRose]

The best place to have a discussion is in the car where they cant escape while driving down the freeway.:)

[EileenMarie]

That is if you can get them in the car :) thanks for the review!

[MOON]

Good write, ome people ont always know what's good for them!

[EileenMarie]

Thank you!

[iliOZ]

hi eileen,
i am married to the wonderful woman i always dreamt of, but guess what, she sent me away at first ... nearly a year later we met again and voila, we are together ever since
it happened because i didn't give up
she admitted ever since that that was that sold me

because of that i understand where you are coming from and hope you will see you may be going towards to

good luck and thanks for the verse

[EileenMarie]

Thanks...... what a nice thing to hear!! Thanks for the review :)

[Tate Morgan]

It does what you want it to And follows the rules.