Mi Amor

The picture of our love

The sky looked beautiful that night.

The night where we talked and pondered our life,

As we walked the city streets in New York City.

Our disfigured shadow,

My arm gripping your neck,

Leaving little red fingerprints

That would fade every time I would let go.

The flame of our love has always been

burning since that first day we met.

I invited you over,

Opened the door in nothing but a towel,

Soaking wet,

The water outlined every muscle

The scale of the definition of my body,

Every crevasse,

All the chisel ripped places

That Dancing and working out dug into my body,

Glistened from the water like glitter on a disco ball.

Your eyes flickered with excitement.

Seeing you, mine did as well.

Then we indulged in each other,

No music or song to define the mood,

Pure no strings sex.

Our next encounter we spent over dinner,

Eating a dish I created with love and tenderness,

As we sat sipping on the crisp red wine in one glass,

I was dirt poor living in an apartment with little furniture

So we made do with that one glass.

So romantic,

Three years later,

Even though a 1,400 mile space separates us,

We are more in love than ever before.

A few nights ago, you were looking at the first star you saw in the sky,

And you sent me a picture saying you wish I was next to you.

I look at the clock at eleven, eleven and that is my wish all the time,

I just wish that forever I could hold you,

As we lay together,

In a pasture of green grass that covers fertile dirt

That feels as soft as a feather.

Our shadow disfigured

Surrounded by billions of four leaf clovers

As I smoke a clove cigarette,

 And our picnic basket right beside us

With the initial K and F chiseled on the outside,

Filled with my favorite chocolate chip cookies

And your famous Spike-Hawaiian punch for our drink.

The song “We found love,” fades away from the Pandora station we are listening to

And Beyonce’s version of “Fever” begins to softy play.

Reviews

[sivan]

i like the flow of the poem as if it were a conversation between you and that person... and love the way it started as "no strings sex" and now its love... can relate... love the image in these lines ... best one I've read in a while
"My arm gripping your neck,
Leaving little red fingerprints
That would fade every time I would let go."

[F.Gentil]

Aww thank you, this poem was created from complete spontaneity. I actually was prompted to use 15 words for a contest, and this is what i ended up creating from the words. The cool part is this represents exactly how my lover and I progressed. Thanks for the review love :)!

[Babe Roxx]

I Love this...I felt it, bro...a real write from heart and soul...it had me reminiscing about a moment taking a night stroll in the city...I really enjoyed the descriptive phrasings and the emotions were on par. Excellent.

[F.Gentil]

Aw thanks :)! It definitely was from the heart I was living each of these moments all over again as I wrote them out. So glad you could feel it man. Thanks for the great review buddy. If you have poetry or any literature for that matter that you have send me a friend request, than a read request of your favorites and I will check them out. Love supporting my fellow colleagues. Thanks once again. :)

[Babe Roxx]

You are very welcome, Kind Sir...I truly enjoyed reading your poem.

I don't force anyone to read my stuff...I keep it organic nowadays...However, I appreciate the visit even if it's a silent read...So I stopped using RR's many years ago for the reason that there are too many spammers that simply don't reciprocate...mind you, it can work, if I can block out the repeat offenders or limit how many works they send me...I will send a friend request...I loved your bio, and I wish you the best in your writing endeavors...isn't this whats about engaging in discussion of poetry. :)

[F.Gentil]

Thanks buddy. I actually enjoy reading and giving feedback, it's really engaging like you mentioned and also rewarding and educational to have discussions about poetry I know that for myself I am always interested in others opinions of my work, how I can make it better and in addition I also love getting insight about the writers work I am reviewing as well Its always a free flow of ideas that always lend itself to redefining work and even creation of new work through the eyes of a new perspective, words you may have used for lack of better words create something deeper than you thought of consciously but, subconscious mind knew. Like that's why I enjoy reading we become deeply logic that we sometimes miss out on the obivious lol..hence discussions, love em' .. . I am new to the site so I haven't really learned the ins and outs, but I love reading all forms of writing. In creating different forms of art I feel it always come from the Heart..guess that's why its the majority of the word lol (corniness still lives lol) but yeah if you can find a way, and have some new work that you would love opinions on I am more then interested. No force required :)

[Babe Roxx]

Lol great minds think alike...I knew free flowed your work...I do it too. :)

That's why I felt your poem so much...Yes, I agree wholeheartedly, I read and read...how did this person write their emotions like that...I figure it out...and convey my emotions in my own style and way of thinking...everyone has their voice and I believe they will have moments to be heard...and there are choices...if people relate to a person writing about nature...to his society is getting ruined...to humorous writes...there is an audience for it. I gravitated to your work because, well, I come from an urban environment...and even though, I came from there, I wanted to shatter the stereotypes and stigma...I'm not writing for retired academia teachers of what not...I write for those who couldn't express themselves...from where I'm from...the blue collar worker...the Chinese people doing tai chi in the park...the Latinos selling their food from trunks...this is what I see...the everyday person that have feelings like those who grew up in a more affluent environment.

I Thank you, for your kind discussion, bro...I look forward to reading more of your poetry. :)