How to Forget You

One day, you'll reach out 

and I won't be around.

I wrote this down to remember,

but memories are fleeting...

I long for these 

recollections to depart

and lead me to a place

...a restful space

where I'm not defined

by the one I'm thinking of

and nerves die off 

from misrepresented love.

...Where I no longer praise you.

I long for aphasia.

Axons won't lend 

themselves to pain.
What remains 

is only blissful ignorance,

and never again 

will the love once-felt
occupy every moment 

in this damaged brain.

Reviews

[Alexa Apothic Red]

I love so much about this piece-the perfect sway of the rhythm, the unique and fitting word choices and symbolism and several lines as well as a feeling that we all have felt but crafted into beautiful words. "and nerves die off from misrepresented love" wow, what a great line, which links up to the "ignorance is bliss" line.. also you tied the nerves dying off with a longing for aphasia and the axons not connecting the pain.. this is beautiful and a very vivid way to show you just don't want to feel anything or this anymore.. just let it die with the memories that are hard to recall. What a cohesive piece. Well done!

[D Alan Johnstone]

Wow... thank you, Alexa! Your assessment is perfect, accurate.

[Alexa Apothic Red]

My English major was more editing focused than composition focused.. so that might be where my strength lies.. I am glad you found something to appreciate in my review.

[Silmara McGarry]

I like when sadness is understood well enough by the one that is feeling sad, I mean, even with the sadness, one is able to express its emotions so clearly. For sadness can be confusing, often with more questions then comprehension. You wrote and expressed the feelings very well in this sad, but great poem. I love the last stanza.

Well done from me!!!
Stay happy
:-)
Sil

[D Alan Johnstone]

Thank you! Don't worry about me... these characters bear my pain :)

[Tabby Mac]

LOVE THIS ONE! I love the topic, and the way you express the process! The emotions pop of the page!!very relatable too!
Tabby

[D Alan Johnstone]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the kind words. I'm inspired to create more.

[Courtney Hough]

so sad but written so beautiful

[D Alan Johnstone]

Thanks, Courtney!
Personally, the catharsis of writing it takes away a lot of the sadness from the experience. Especially when kind words are given in regards to the work.
TYTY