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Heaven Seeker

Heaven Seeker

A Poem by Falcon1
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Looking for the divine love of Jesus Christ

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heaven seeker and the honey bee
Lord if it was up to me
Both would serve their time with you 
Blessed in time for the growing of the fruits and plants

of the earth to sustain mankind
On the face of the earth
Bee make honey
and they also pollenate the plants and the trees

Which Makes us the air we breeze
It just wouldn't be possible for life
If It wasn't for the bees like these.
So I say dear Friend God Bless the bees.

© 2018 Falcon1



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I agree my friend. The bees are a blessing for us. I loved the story and the logic of your amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

Posted 5 Months Ago


"Bee make honey" ... or do bee's make honey?

The last stanza is scientifically inaccurate. Plants don't make the air and bees are not the sole mechanism of pollination. The decreasing bee population is most likely cyclical over tens of thousands of years... as we discover more about there long term presence via the fossil record it becomes clear that extreme dips in their population is not at all abnormal... you present the fashionable alternative as fact (likely due to a certain recently added Netflix documentary) The logic of this poem crumbles under those facts... renders your "bee" theme irrelevant... makes your religious undertones look ignorant and silly.

I get what you're going for... it's just... poorly reasoned as you present it.


Posted 6 Months Ago


"Heaven Seeker"
Falcon1,
The photo is very fitting for this poem! Majestic message
told through nature's pollinator.; such a nice message:
First line "Heaven seeker and honey bee"
Fourth line "Blessed in time for the fruits and the plants."
The whole poem is one of thankfulness and I like how it
ends with more thankfulness:
"If it wasn't for the bees like these.
So I say dear friend God Bless the bees."
Nicely done!
Blessings,
Kathy


Posted 6 Months Ago


Falcon1

6 Months Ago

Thanks Kathy for tantalizing My poem so sweetly Your remarks make me smile heavenly.

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