Adventures

All those insane calls

From the place that we've never been.

wandering alone

On the strayed paths.

Roads we leave

to follow the trails..

Once again when we do something

For the first time

When we escape the ordinary

To fill our souls..

That's when the Adventure begins..

Reviews

[Jes' Pi]

Your poem reminds me of a Romanian poem named "O, plecarile, plecarile..."(translation: Oh, departures, departures...) written by Aron Cotrus. In my opinion, both poems contain the same message:
An indomitable human wish. Humans always had the need to know and to see more, a need for travel, a need for change. The verses "All those insane calls
From the place that we've never been." are the perfect image of this wish. The human soul can't be caged, so our solution is traveling. We leave the usual for the exotic until the exotic becomes usual too ("For the first time
When we escape the ordinary
To fill our souls..").


I think you shouldn't use the ellipsis after the words "trails" and "souls" because when you use the ellipsis at the end of the poem, it will give a more intense feeling to the reader. In short, don't use too many ellipses (this opinion is subjective).

In conclusion, I think you wrote a good poem with a good message. I suggest you read the Romanian poem which has the same message as yours because it will teach you how to exaggerate some elements when you write a poem (in a good way).


Good luck!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you so much for helping me out...I will read that poem..and I guess I learned something new here... thanks

[Jes' Pi]

You're welcome!

[Pragati Chaudhary]

Ohh that's so beautiful- Keep writing!

[grayscale]

I do feel a yearning for adventure, and i love how this captures the essence of that feeling, short and sweet but full of yearning to as you say "... follow the trails..."

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thanks for the lovely review

[Priyanshi]

Another well written poem by u, Farhan
Keep writing:)

[Donicca Dona L]

Loving this one. Right to the to the point . Lets just follow whatever fills our soul with happiness and life.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thanks for your time and review

[Kimiko Watson]

Great piece my friend Keep up the good work.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you 😄

[Hebe]

Lovely verse and oh so true :)

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you Hebe

[emipoemi]

Short, sweet, and true. Well done.

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you emi

[Anjali]

True and beautiful words. Absolutely loved it!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Thank you so much Anjali

[Anjali]

You're very welcome!

[wordman]

and may we always have adventures,the spice of life

[Farhan Shaikh]

May be... thanks for the time Mr.Wordman