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Adventures

Adventures

A Poem by Farhan Shaikh

All those insane calls
From the place that we've never been.
wandering alone
On the strayed paths.
Roads we leave
to follow the trails..
Once again when we do something
For the first time
When we escape the ordinary
To fill our souls..
That's when the Adventure begins..

© 2017 Farhan Shaikh



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Your poem reminds me of a Romanian poem named "O, plecarile, plecarile..."(translation: Oh, departures, departures...) written by Aron Cotrus. In my opinion, both poems contain the same message:
An indomitable human wish. Humans always had the need to know and to see more, a need for travel, a need for change. The verses "All those insane calls
From the place that we've never been." are the perfect image of this wish. The human soul can't be caged, so our solution is traveling. We leave the usual for the exotic until the exotic becomes usual too ("For the first time
When we escape the ordinary
To fill our souls..").


I think you shouldn't use the ellipsis after the words "trails" and "souls" because when you use the ellipsis at the end of the poem, it will give a more intense feeling to the reader. In short, don't use too many ellipses (this opinion is subjective).

In conclusion, I think you wrote a good poem with a good message. I suggest you read the Romanian poem which has the same message as yours because it will teach you how to exaggerate some elements when you write a poem (in a good way).


Good luck!



Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Farhan Shaikh

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much for helping me out...I will read that poem..and I guess I learned something new he.. read more
Jes' Pi

7 Months Ago

You're welcome!



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I do feel a yearning for adventure, and i love how this captures the essence of that feeling, short and sweet but full of yearning to as you say "... follow the trails..."

Posted 5 Months Ago


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Farhan Shaikh

5 Months Ago

Thanks for the lovely review
Another well written poem by u, Farhan
Keep writing:)

Posted 6 Months Ago


Loving this one. Right to the to the point . Lets just follow whatever fills our soul with happiness and life.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

6 Months Ago

Thanks for your time and review
Your poem reminds me of a Romanian poem named "O, plecarile, plecarile..."(translation: Oh, departures, departures...) written by Aron Cotrus. In my opinion, both poems contain the same message:
An indomitable human wish. Humans always had the need to know and to see more, a need for travel, a need for change. The verses "All those insane calls
From the place that we've never been." are the perfect image of this wish. The human soul can't be caged, so our solution is traveling. We leave the usual for the exotic until the exotic becomes usual too ("For the first time
When we escape the ordinary
To fill our souls..").


I think you shouldn't use the ellipsis after the words "trails" and "souls" because when you use the ellipsis at the end of the poem, it will give a more intense feeling to the reader. In short, don't use too many ellipses (this opinion is subjective).

In conclusion, I think you wrote a good poem with a good message. I suggest you read the Romanian poem which has the same message as yours because it will teach you how to exaggerate some elements when you write a poem (in a good way).


Good luck!



Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Farhan Shaikh

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much for helping me out...I will read that poem..and I guess I learned something new he.. read more
Jes' Pi

7 Months Ago

You're welcome!
Great piece my friend Keep up the good work.

Posted 7 Months Ago


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Farhan Shaikh

7 Months Ago

Thank you 😄
Lovely verse and oh so true :)

Posted 7 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

7 Months Ago

Thank you Hebe
Short, sweet, and true. Well done.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

7 Months Ago

Thank you emi
True and beautiful words. Absolutely loved it!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much Anjali
Anjali

7 Months Ago

You're very welcome!
and may we always have adventures,the spice of life

Posted 7 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

7 Months Ago

May be... thanks for the time Mr.Wordman
This is one of your best. You have expressed the true meaning of living and identifying yourself. It feels that this poem marks a beginning to your journey to find yourself. I loved this poem as it is filled with wise words. Keep it up.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Farhan Shaikh

7 Months Ago

I'm really glad you like it

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