`stainless steel`

standing
 in the shadows
       of love with

 half a heart

 sanded down to that flat final finish
 serrated with sorrow's sharp knife

all that remains
are rusted reminders
of love's laughter once shared

        and your stainless steel heart
                  is no worse for the ware

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i was cut enough by sorrow's sharp knife, in my life....have bled these same words.

and now my heart is stainless steel...it's the protective shield we develop...
and sometimes now it seems the pain bypasses the emotional state of mind and goes straight to the pen.

[Fran Marie]

yes, I think we all bled some sorrow at some point in life... thanks so much ,Jacob;

[jacob erin-cilberto]

but like that song says...and aptly so, "you bleed just to know you're alive"

:)))

[Valentine]

Very well written and thoughts expressed. Valentine

[Fran Marie]

Thank you so very mu h, Valentine,

[Adam Adams]

Poignant drops of remorse're being found in your somber poetry. It displays how even the love can be a 'stainless piece of steel' & how it could be eroded by the blood of heart. Nice flow of ink.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks so vey much , Adams, for reading and reviews of my poetry..

[alf]

Hi Fran. I felt the pain! So sad, and the emotion thrusts forth from the words to grab the readers attention, and wrest empathy . . . for they too have suffered at some point. A stainless steel heart . . . cold, uncompromising and impervious, what a wonderful analogy!!. Loved this, alf

[Fran Marie]

Thanks, Alf, I so very much appriciate it..

[....................]

When the surface of our heart is exposed the oxidation of pain eats away at it while the cold steel heart of the culprit remains as ever - impenetrable. A cold write that chews at the core.

[Fran Marie]

So true ..many thanks FT..I so appreciate it;

[Michael G. Smith]

Total eclipse of the heart. It Sucks when you see the other not showing outward signs of the pains we feel because the love separation. You truly touch with a perfect fit of words.

[Fran Marie]

Thanks Michael, so very much;

[Matching Socks]

You're just remarkable. Love reading your poems. This one is fantastic.

[Fran Marie]

Awhh..thanks so much for reviewing my poetry

[Ashfallen]

I love this. It made me remember, and ache.
B******s.

[Fran Marie]

Sounds like you stood in the shadow of love also,thanks so much for the review

[Ashfallen]

I definitely stood there. Is there any escape from that shadow?
You're very welcome, it was a pleasure to read this feeling and place captured so perfectly.