`Bleeped`

 

What's the sense in trying
   when you keep on denying
       the love I seek

 
I feel as tho~ I'm dying
   inside my heart is crying
       as I try to sleep

 
Your excuses I'm not buying
   your loving lips are lying
       making me weep

 
I'm so tired of sighing
  in love's misery defying
      my emotions running deep

 
 Out of your life I'm flying
   and baby I'm not jiving
      so you can go get bleeped
      

Reviews

[Matching Socks]

oh yeah... the big finish, go bleep yourself you bleeping.
damn, i like that. : )

[Fran Marie]

lol,yes indeed...thanks so much for reading;

[Matching Socks]

sometimes the bleeps are more effective than the actual 'bad' word ; )

[Fran Marie]

yep...it sure is

[Anonymous]

Perfect...great man...u r so spontaneous...

[Jimmy Greenie]

Like the last line particularly. The whole things good. And the way the last line of each stanza (oh, I hate that word) rhyme. One thing I would say is that perhaps the last line of the first verse (I don't care what your supposed to say, I prefer the word verse) possibly doesn't have enough syllables. It doesn't quite flow properly. And jiving doesn't really rhyme with flying
Mind you, It's better than anything I could do! ;)

[Anne Hill]

haha i love the end

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very catchy and witty piece... the ending was spectacular I must say... I had to chuckle at that. Awesome write.

[just is]

I love it, This is so wonderful, Beautiful and cute, well written. I liked this alot. Great write here

[Ebs]

Loved it. Once again another brilliant poem.

ebs