`Sullen Tears`

Can you feel the pain in my heart

 sullen tears it bleeds 'pon my face

  since the time we drifted apart

constant heartaches I can't erase

 

 

Can you sense the love I still have

 how I'm hurting being alone

thinking of good times and the bad

when I claimed your love as my own

 

 

Can you grasp the depth of my soul

its breathing out and breathing in

The core of me loses control

when stars whisper your name thru~ wind

 

 

Can you look into my sad eyes

and truly see my point of view

Often I wear a thin disguise

if you were wise, you'd see right through

 

 

Can you not know all the signs

when a woman shares her love true

'Tis feelings of the deepest kind

Now this woman's heart cries for you.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

this is so beautiful..i always adore your writings
how soothing ,how nice..seems you wont ever be short of
such beautiful words and what depth of meaning
and how they are aligned so nicely together
like a soft song calling for wonderful feelings
truthful faithful and ever loving..how i am touched
lovely write

This is really good, i like the rhythm of this write. Your emotions are strong.

[Abdul Aziz]

Pain and longing combine to create a symphony with words. The fact that you are an expert with formal poetry helps you to no end. I like your style very much.
You have laid words softly in this poem, and have been subtle with your statements, though not too subtle to be hard to understand, either. I would like to quote many lines in this poem. But then, I'd be forced to quote almost the entire thing!
This is a short, precise, and beautiful write. Great job!

[Tina Kline]

Such a painful longing in this. It rings very sad but it is a very beautiful poem. The deep wanting and not having, the loneliness, yes, very painful.

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"Can you grasp the depth of my soul
its breathing out and breathing in
The core of me loses control
when stars whisper your name thru~ wind'
{Ha!!!---Very Kool Verse!!!--love yer poetry!!!}

"'Tis feelings of the deepest kind
Now this woman's heart cries for you."
{beautiful lines!!!}

james:-)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very painful piece yet in a way beautifully melancholy... you bring a dramatic flare to your verses that expresses undeniable emotions.

[Tammy]

Lovely.....

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This is sad and heartbreaking, pleading and mournful. Very moving Fran!.....I have to go blow my nose now. ;o(