Whistle of life

"your life is with you"

Singing in its feminine prosperity

the life whistles in my ear

says - "you sing too child"...

I bow at music

and kiss rosy notes

that emancipate me...

I float on wind-like patterns

that her whistles set in

motion on the sky..

I wish to be happy

but i find bliss to see

tears and ecstasy both...

The life of infinite creatures

so burdened yet so pleasant

look at me in the eye and

sing -

"I am with you"

Reviews

[Ranfer]

I was totally gone into another world.Your imagination is amazing.Wonderful poem

[Gaurav]

Thank you so much..love your words :)

[Emily]

Beautiful language, which create magical imagery. I particularly love how how third stanza flows. Keep it up!

[Gaurav]

Thank you Emily for your positive feedback.

[barleygirl]

This is very original & unexpected, the way you describe a basic feeling about life . . . that it can be musical. The 2nd stanza is one of the best I've read lately. It's so imaginative & conveys enthusiasm when song sets a person free. I also like the contrast of tears & ecstasy, as life is a tapestry of song that conveys both sadness & joy. I can feel the lightness & lilting rhythm of your message.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou so much for appreciating the work. It matters a lot.

[Ted Kniffen]

A very nice sentiment. Life is like a song we all must sing. I would consider dropping some of the articles to smooth the flow e.g.' Singing in its feminine prosperity the life whistles in my ear' would read better as 'Singing in its feminine prosperity, life whistles in my ear' and in the stanza
I wish to be happy
but i find bliss to see
tears and ecstasy both...
happy and bliss are essentially the same emotion so it doesn't sound quite right here, perhaps bliss is not quite the right word here.
Other than that, a good write. Keep going

[Gaurav]

Thanks Ted for your review. I am glad that you took time to suggest few anomalies. I agree on the first suggestion. But happiness and bliss, despite suggesting one emotions, are different. Bliss is the higher state compared with happiness. Bliss is when peace is combined with happiness. Hope i am right here. Thanks again :)

[Bibliophile-Tipsy]

Beautifully written "whistle of life"

[Gaurav]

Thank you Tipsy.

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Beautiful tone very gentle and a great message. Starz

[Gaurav]

Thanks Starz. Also, thankyou for giving suggestions on art aspects. will ask for your guidance in future as well :)

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No worries

[wordman]

through thick or thin
it will always be by your side
great message

[Gaurav]

Appreciate your kind review.

[Kathryn Smith]

Awww I really love this one! Well written and well said my dear. xx

[Gaurav]

Thanks Kathryn

[Jacob Clifford]

Very nice poem, Gaurav. It's is gentle and hopeful, tender and loving. Very sweet.

[Gaurav]

Thankyou Clifford. Appreciate your feedback.