Colour me in Kisses

Colour me in Kisses

A Poem by Gary H

Crimson lines drip down endlessly
Outside a body, inside I WANT to feel you.
Let me open a door
Open until I can see
Understand the struggle you fight
Realise your pain, release your heart.

My world is yours
Emotions affected by the cut.

Incision of that blade hurts me too
Not seen or felt by you.

Knives dig into my body
I let them, want them.
Spurting blood sees demons laugh
Sensing relief when life has no reason.
Enticing I will cry - 'come with me now'
Showering you forever in affection, care and love.
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© 2008 Gary H



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I'm uncomfortable about blood so I can't focus too well on this. But these two lines catch my eye "Incision of that blade hurts me too" and "Knives dig into my body" ... in fact I read them before I read the first line. Thinking about this as far as I can, it is a loving plea couched in the language of the cutter to try and find another way. Strong, bold poem.


Posted 9 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.




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Now that's a neat effect...and as a massive acrostic writer I think it's great
Well done

Posted 9 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Thought I had reviewed this, you must nudge me!!

Like Orlando I'm not great with blood............but your words of understanding are clear,
cutting a release for one, and a hurt for another to watch someone feel so about
themselves.

My world is yours
Emotions affected by the cut.

So tender in all the mix of self harm and your words leave no doubt how bloody it can be.
The layout is wonderful...........

Posted 9 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Such a wonderful write. I always like pieces like this. I find them interesting and you have written one that is perfect did not seemed forced to fit into a mold of sorts. You words speak of desiring an understand of the inter workings of a person and being that you wish to feel what they feel and see the world through their eyes.

Lovely!!!!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Well, that's about the coolest thing I've ever seen.....how did you do that???

Great write...very haunting!

Posted 9 Years Ago


5 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Very different, with the blood dripping. I like the touch though as it lent strength to your words.

"Emotions affected by the cut."

"Incision of that blade hurts me too"

"Knives dig into my body
I let them, want them."

A very powerful and vivid poem.
Well done!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.

A bittersweet write with an uplifting tone although there seems to be much suffering and longing. Well expressed. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha


Posted 9 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.

Saw frim the notes you had edited this so i came to take a look..
The dripping blood adds so much to this.. makes the writing more visual in ones mind.
How did you do that?
Looks perfect with your words.

Posted 9 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.

This is so painful...it dig through the nerves and feel the blood dripping on my skin. Powerful.
Very evocative.

Great write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.

This is a heartwrenching poem to read. The acrostic style is very good. The subject is one i know a little about .
Trying to understand a cutter, this is something hard to do ..I ask my friends who do this why and they have no answers.. when i did it years back it was to assauge guilt, guilt that was not even mine , but in my eyes it was so.

Many ancient cultures cut themselves as an art form .. those who do it today it is more a release or perhaps a way to feel .. even if it is pain.

The feelings you have are so strong in this , wanting to help the person. Sometimes we cannot help.. i have tried.
A friend of mine takes Luvox it seems to help with her cutting which was way out of hand, she was taking it too far.

I emjoyed this poem of questioning and expressed love.

Chloe
xoxo

Posted 9 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.

I'm uncomfortable about blood so I can't focus too well on this. But these two lines catch my eye "Incision of that blade hurts me too" and "Knives dig into my body" ... in fact I read them before I read the first line. Thinking about this as far as I can, it is a loving plea couched in the language of the cutter to try and find another way. Strong, bold poem.


Posted 9 Years Ago


7 of 7 people found this review constructive.


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