Dreams of Forbidden Love

A new poem (:

 Our forbidden love is held together by a dream,

a feeling of happiness make believe.

 

Day becomes night,

and my eyes begin to close,

my thoughts of you gently arose.

 

Our secret then becomes known, 

when the simplest kiss is shown

I smile to see them look away,

just sorry to invade.

 

Suddenly, we're alone.

Our lips touch again

leaving me breathless,

and dreading an end.

 

The closeness of our bodies

bring a new heat, 

filled with passion and love,

we no longer feel of defeat.

 

I look into your eyes to savor the moment

only to find disappointment.

 

"Good bye," you say

and our dream, once more, fades away.

Author's Note

Your opinion would be lovely (:

Reviews

[Dana Kathryn]

Hello JamieElizabeth, Thankyou for your advice,Funny thing is i do not know really how to format or put my poetry into sections,Would love to know how to do that asap,You have a ton of talent and only 15 wow,I was like you as a teen,very intelligent and i have been writing since age 10,poetry that is lol.This poem really spoke to me and brought bitter sweet tears to my eyes as well,Good job and def keep up the Awesome work!! Dana :)

[Addie]

Oh I like where this went. It's like at first you think love is going to happen, and then it does, and then that dream goes away. Great idea. I like it =)

[Stacey Lynn Fore]

i'm not really sure which of the deadly sins this is? lust?

[A.M. Everlasting]

This poem is really great :) I love the intense feeling you get from reading it and then at the end, when you realize it's just a dream, the feeling of disappointment I feel...I mean, you feel. lol. Loved it :)

[caliban]

good job, keep it up.