My Fairy Sister

What can i say?

My life took a turn for the better that day

Our relationship has grown and blossomed like a flower

How I've changed from awkward and clumsy to good and proper

All i needed was your guidance and trust

My life i would gladly give for you if its a must

I gave you my secrets and with that the key to my soul

Your laugh and your smile as well as your kindness have made pure all that in me that was foul

Mere common words cannot describe how much i value our friendship

If you ever need me I promise to always be at your side even when time takes hold and strengthens its grip

This is a tribute to you my little fairy sister in the only way i know how

These words with their magic i will bend and for you now they will bow.

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

this is a sweet piece... the rhymes did feel a little off, but still pleasant... it told a story and ideas flowed nicely... that is important.. the rest can be worked on... the message in this one is what is important and it is clear and affecting... well done..

[Hasan Hersi]

Thanks its one of my first poems so i might need to work on it a bit.

[AprilRN1210]

that is certainly an option.. I left my earlier ones alone, so I can measure growth in myself.. all depends on what you want to do with it... I have only been writing for about five months, so I have a long way to go myself.. it was my pleasure, you're more than welcome.. and nice to meet you:)

[Hasan Hersi]

nice to meet you too :)

[DrummerBrian95]

This poem made me smile. I can really see you love your sister, and this is a very nice piece about her. I wish I had a good relationship with my little sister like this.

[Hasan Hersi]

Thanks mate its actually one of my really close friends

[ScoobyDooby]

I like this piece c:
Make sure you follow a pattern with rhymes. say/day, trust/must, how/bow are the only ones that work. If you were to find other words in those spots were it doesn't rhyme like soul and foul it would flow a lot better. I know one would assume that foul and soul would rhyme but sadly it doesn't. A tip for you would to read your writings out loud to yourself. It's one of the best ways to find an error. Good pen! c:

[Hasan Hersi]

Thanks! Il take all that into note