Prison of my own design

Prison of my own design

A Story by Haydenloveland

The walls I built
Were meant to protect me

But here i am
Scared, frightened and lonely
Within this dark prison I built myself

I call out for help
No one hears me

I try to break out
Not much luck

But what's on the other side?
I've been here so long
Have i forgotten so easily

A microscopic light just formed
I try and touch it
I am filled with warmth
The walls soon collapse

Here I am
Scared
Frightened
But no longer lonely
There is people who love me

© 2017 Haydenloveland



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"These walls are kind of funny. First you hate ’em, then you get used to ’em. Enough time passes, gets so you depend on them. That’s institutionalized." - Red, Shawshank Redemption

I think we just get used to the comfort of ourselves. We just forget to share and open up. We brainwash ourselves.

Enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I really liked it, you executed the personal prison thing much better than I did. Only thing is you wrote "There is people who love me." However, for boring grammatical reasons it's "There are people who love."

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


I liked this. The last line should have read:
There are.... However, was your use of 'is' perhaps intentional, an accent? Was your lower case use of 'I' for effect?
Quite raw, strong emotions came across. I felt quite moved by the last stanza. Very moving.

Posted 1 Month Ago


"These walls are kind of funny. First you hate ’em, then you get used to ’em. Enough time passes, gets so you depend on them. That’s institutionalized." - Red, Shawshank Redemption

I think we just get used to the comfort of ourselves. We just forget to share and open up. We brainwash ourselves.

Enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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