Prison of my own design

Prison of my own design

A Story by Haydenloveland

The walls I built
Were meant to protect me

But here i am
Scared, frightened and lonely
Within this dark prison I built myself

I call out for help
No one hears me

I try to break out
Not much luck

But what's on the other side?
I've been here so long
Have i forgotten so easily

A microscopic light just formed
I try and touch it
I am filled with warmth
The walls soon collapse

Here I am
Scared
Frightened
But no longer lonely
There is people who love me

© 2017 Haydenloveland



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"These walls are kind of funny. First you hate ’em, then you get used to ’em. Enough time passes, gets so you depend on them. That’s institutionalized." - Red, Shawshank Redemption

I think we just get used to the comfort of ourselves. We just forget to share and open up. We brainwash ourselves.

Enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I really liked it, you executed the personal prison thing much better than I did. Only thing is you wrote "There is people who love me." However, for boring grammatical reasons it's "There are people who love."

Posted 10 Months Ago


I liked this. The last line should have read:
There are.... However, was your use of 'is' perhaps intentional, an accent? Was your lower case use of 'I' for effect?
Quite raw, strong emotions came across. I felt quite moved by the last stanza. Very moving.

Posted 10 Months Ago


"These walls are kind of funny. First you hate ’em, then you get used to ’em. Enough time passes, gets so you depend on them. That’s institutionalized." - Red, Shawshank Redemption

I think we just get used to the comfort of ourselves. We just forget to share and open up. We brainwash ourselves.

Enjoyed your poem. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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