Just a Dream

Just a Dream

A Poem by AK
"

Memories are trodden over by time and they are real no more

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What happened during winter days
When I'd spend my eves with you?
Are memories of warmth but my dream
Or are they really true?

Our talks did span for hours or more
Flying with the moon and stars.
But was your soul just a mirage seen
Across my prison bars?

Eerie nights in my room I'd pass
And on my screen you'd be.
Did we really chase the demons away
And next morning's sunrise see?

What of those tender embraces we had,
Those kisses that'd last so long.
Was all that my horse running wild
On the plains of some love song?

The wheels of time smash the ground
So old tracks are no longer seen.
What you make of what remains
Ain't reality, just a dream.

© 2014 AK



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Good one, truly an amazing piece and great work in it

Posted 3 Years Ago


This is really good. I like how it flows so smoothly, and how well the story is told out. I think my favorite part was the final two lines in the fourth stanza. Something struck a chord in how you worded that. Nicely done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Beautifully crafted. It feels surprisingly clean and well thought-out. When I read those lines...

''But was your soul just a mirage seen
Across my prison bars? ''

...my breath was taken away ! You know you've been successful when you pinch a reader's heart with a couple lines. Well done !


Posted 3 Years Ago


AK

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reviewing, Yann! (:
I'll admit I was secretly pleased at the lines you quoted as.. read more
I like the way this flows, easy to read.. "eerie nights in my room i'd pass and on my screen you'd be…" I like how you put technology in there. and it's so true how difficult it is to escape past loves or acquaintances in our computer world. Good job :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


AK

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your review, Nance :) I appreciate your words.
Nance

3 Years Ago

your'e welcome! I love the rhyming pattern and it flows so easily. I relate to it as well. : )

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