Paper fish

Paper fish

A Poem by Relic
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A variation on another poem I wrote.

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Raccoon colored clouds, 
darkness gathers.
A tumbling sky, 
shoulders splatter.

Street puddles boil and gutters clatter.
Bullfrogs assert: 
what does it matter?

Neon light tassels lay lucent streaks
on Manhattan sidewalks 
and mirrored streets.

The rain from its cage has been released.
Had thunder been a steak
Could I serve a feast?

But today, I've become a sidewalk fish
whose shoes go squeak 
and squeal and swish,
near buildings that sit
like sunken ships.

So I mop up memories
and swim away
from a chlorinated sidewalk 
this wet Tuesday.

But I feel, yes, I feel
that come what may,
I'm a paper fish
In this city today.




© 2017 Relic



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The imagery in this poem is awesome. Building as sunken ships, chlorinated sidewalks and paper fish...simply a pleasure to read.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Relic

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you DIVYA. :)
DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

The pleasure is mine. You are welcome. :)
This poem, like your other works that I've had the pleasure of reading, creates the most extraordinary mental images. Well done.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Relic

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you very much. :)
Ah, a place to leave a comment, but the comment isn't for this poem which is wonderful btw, it for the one titled "Thank you" ...which we are unable to say "no, don't go"

Posted 2 Months Ago


Oh you beautiful man with your beautiful mind. Were I smarter than I am I'd give a better review but alas... I am more pretty than brainy. Still I enjoyed this, it is very lyrical and pleasant. Would make a nice tattoo.

Posted 3 Months Ago


Relic

3 Months Ago

haha, pretty than brainy? I doubt that. You are a great writer and one I enjoy. Thank you bro. lol
...................(wOw!).........................

I have no words........my voice is in my awe!!

(I wonder, though, why there's no coda line for Stanza 3....the musicality feels like it needs it. just a small little line like you do at the end of each other stanza- "what does it matter?" or "Can I serve a feast" or "in this city today" . Just wondering. I thoroughly enjoyed everything else about this. Well done!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Relic

3 Months Ago

Never thought to put one in. Thanks for the review.
This piece evoked images/smells/tactile...stuff. I can't think of the words when confronted with such an elegant array!

Posted 3 Months Ago


Relic

3 Months Ago

Thanks for your review Carol. :)
I really enjoyed this well-written poem..I can see how delicate each line is, how perfectly you have framed everything..I can't find a single fault...
Excellent writing! :))

Posted 3 Months Ago


Relic

3 Months Ago

Thanks so much for reading and the nice review. :)
Very nice in enjoy reading nice poem

Posted 3 Months Ago


Relic

3 Months Ago

Thank you Olympia.
And the picture is beautiful
😍

Posted 3 Months Ago


How ironic that it is Tuesday and Raining where I am. I love this.
Today this rain is a symbol of tears but you have made it a magical scene and still inlaid the sorrow. I have missed reading your thoughts Sweet Buddy

Posted 3 Months Ago


Relic

3 Months Ago

You're very kind, thank you Priscilla. :)

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