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I will plant daffodils here if you want.

I will plant daffodils here if you want.

A Poem by Relic

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 I'll plant these daffodils here by your grave.
And when they've grown 
and blossomed with life; 
when sunlight from a penny-colored sun
feeds them,
I'll see them exist,
cheerful in yellow smiles and stiff collars.

But I'll feel no delight 
nor contentment.
Nor will I happily float away as fulfilled 
as a hummingbird or bee.

I'll plod away instead, 
never expecting messages from the dead,
while holding a perpetual resentment at God
for keeping resurrection to himself. 




© 2018 Relic



Author's Note

 Relic
Some wounds never heal. :(

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This is so powerful and so sad. Excellent job. :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

Thank you Purple Witch. :)
"I'll trudge away instead,
never expecting messages from the dead.
And a perpetual resentment at God

for keeping resurrection to himself."

These last four lines are my favorite, completely relatable. You have an excellent way of drawing the raw emotion from your lines. I enjoyed this immensely!

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much, Meaghan. :)
"What a day of rejoicing that will be"
Promises told, made to believe
Someone said we shall meet again..
How long can one wait for sweet by and by..?

This touches deep ... causes a soul to pause..

One of your best...

Jazzy

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

I appreciate that Jazzy, thank you. :)
J. J.  Nightingale

9 Months Ago

You are welcome...........................:)...........
This is incredibly poignant. I read the first stanza, and believed I would be reading a lovely poem about nature's beauty. I was feeling your pain in the final stanza. So beautiful.

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

Thanks very much for your thoughts. :)
holy dam dude.....this is awesome....so so real....well love it...yes.nice nice.

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

:) Thanks very much, appreciate it.
Wow there's so much feeling and imagery in this. Such a great honest write that speaks to grief. I loved reading

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

Thanks so much em. :)
the last line leaves me thinking :D I like it! True too :D

penny-coloured sun evoked a bright image - nice

sound to me like the narrator wants to be done with this particular passing - and yet there's something still holding him there.

Nice work X

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

That's a plausible interpretation KWP, thanks. :)
A very touching piece, Relic. Those final lines really hit home. He did say that he was a greedy and jealous God after all.

I haven't experienced much of this kind of mourning as yet in my life, but i do know it is on the horizon and it will most probably take all of my steely resolve to prepare myself for what lies ahead.

A very melancholic poem. Gentle in its sadness with just that right hint of venom at conclusion.

A fine piece of writing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

Thank you very much Dooley. I too will have to prepare.
planting flowers for the gone but not forgotten thanks for the lovely poetry,

Posted 9 Months Ago


 Relic

9 Months Ago

Thank you, Roxane.

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