Jump

She begged for him to take the jump

To make a leap of faith

Cast off better judgment

Step off the edge and wait

 

And it was not until he fell

Through the unforgiving sky

That he found she had not given him

Wings for which to fly

Reviews

[Soundz]

I know this feeling! haha
Girl led me downtown when I just got old enough to drink and introduced me to not cool dudes.
Anyway, after I got back up, I showed em how it's done ;)

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

did you write this with the girl who pushed her boyfriend to suicide in mind? if not it's crazy applicable to the story. aside from that i thought it was well done

[Inkh(e)art]

I didn't have that in mind. I wrote this quite a while ago. I meant for it to be a metaphor rather than a literal jumping but I appreciate the difference in application. Thank you for the review!

[Cpt. Alex Rover]

This is really good! The depth in which you put into two paragraphs astounds me, but perhaps a little formatting might give it more impact

[Inkh(e)art]

Thank you for review :) and I'll take into consideration

[Angel]

Wow very powerful. It's short yet strong. Nice job.

[Inkh(e)art]

Thank you so much!

[Angel]

You are welcome!