ghost

I watch her cry

into her sleep

washing clothes with

holes

in the creek

sweeping unused rooms 

unwalked floors

and waiting for

unopened doors

Author's Note

I feel that there should be more to this poem.

Reviews

[Becky]

I'm just going to spend the rest of my night stalking all your work, since your style is just so unique and... raw. It's so powerful, I think I might just die of an overload of good poetry. You just know exactly what to say to get the message across.

The only thing you might think about changing is in the first line, "watched" to "watch." It might make the piece more alive. It's your poem, though, and if that's how you like it, that's how it should stay. I personally don't think there should be any more to it.

It just sends chills down my spine every time I re-read it! Nice work!

Seriously. I'm just going to go down the list and read every. single. piece.