In My Life

Life Lessons

I've learned from those who've come,

and Those who’ve gone...

Many games my life has played.
Yet, only a few have stayed.

Take advantage of the time you have,

 because most don't,
Sad thing is, it’s not that they can't,

 they just won't.

Fear, doubt,

lack of faith in the relationship.
Realize those people are there for more than just friendship.

They're there for your love, your heart, your thoughts,

 and your words.
The negative poisonous people of the world will come in herds.

This is the fight, which will make or break.
Just to see how much your love for them can take.

If you take for granted the gift of today,

There shall be a bigger price to pay

 

Thinking these people will be there tomorrow,
What illusion do you live in, where time is a thing you can just borrow?

You have one life to live,
One heart to give,

And I've learned all this,

In my life.

 

Reviews

[OfDeathandLove]

I absolutely loved the message in this. It is so relatable, knowing how most of the people we associate with are only temporarily there, so we should enjoy them while they're a part of us. The rhymes were also wonderful.

However, I could feel absolutely no rhythm in this. Usually, with poems that rhyme, a beat is there that also brings the reader along, but without a beat, this poem just feel choppy and has no flow. Adding a rhythm would help this poem to become great.

[Ashanty Paz]

Thanks for your thoughts. I am fairly new with sharing my writings, still trying to get used to writing out my final thoughts. How do you think I should go about adding a rhythm?