Asleep

Her body 

pretzeled 

across our 

bedspread

Arms 

and legs 

akimbo

Her hands 

splayed opened 

wide like 

flower petals 

on an ocean 

of fine silken 

swells

Author's Note

Restictions. Must be 22 words or less. I used the maximum allotted.

Reviews

[FaeryQueen]

i love the feeling of this poem,!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[JulianaSun]

So, this is a poem about someone´s sleeping habits. Probably a girlfriend. Cute. I like it very much. It´s wonderfully written.

J

[Olivia]

This is very beautiful. I admire how you could make such a powerful image in just a few words

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

I very much appreciate it. Thank you. I would say slightly inspired by my good friend passed out on my bed.

[Olivia]

Nice. lol

[terry smith]

I liked this very much. I like when someone can paint a picture with only a few words, and you did that.

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

I admire your work. I hope you can comb through a few of mine, some you find needing work, let me know. It would be appreciated.