Missing in Burma

I aint living no dream anymore

 

 

Out here in the sun
You're lost in the thoughts
of your mind, flows
back and forth,
and back and forth like
softspread glory on
the sweating heat.

You gaze, softly like
you can't see the clouded
haze stripping the
label off a beer bottle,
Dear Lord, I can't have
it all; I don't own the world.

You don't own the world and
you're freefalling, there's
nothing left to lose,
no ambitions, no inhibitions,
no platforms to stand on,
no champagne to sober,
there's no way
to steer away, there's
no way to tell her
those three words                                         (i love you)
because they're dream words like
these words they're empty
words, Lord, I can't have
it all.

And there's nowhere left to run,
There's nowhere left to hide,
There's no meta-space, no
planet orb, no glowing rays
of Jupiter, it's many moons,
it's many circles
going round and round
and round and round we go on
and about in a  
roundabout way I'm feeling sick.
Dear God, there's nothing
left but life in all it's danger
and despair and dirt,
There's nothing left but
truth and life.

How you hate life.

How annoying.

You're crocs don't fit,
You're crops don't grow,
You're songs don't play,
You're friends don't say
how much they adore
you do they? Do they?

And you're missing my friend,
You're missing in Burma
as the fire rages and the
book is turning it's pages
away from your mystic sages
who told you the best way.

I'm lost in Burma, I'm gone,
I'm away!
But powers bring me down
to earth, to truth, to hope,
to love, to peace, to hurt,
to opened eyes, to the
summer flies but it's here,
it's here I'll be.

And it's here I will stay.

Reviews

[Sun Dog]

Hey, I like this!!! It's sort of like getting on a train that doesn't stop where you think it is going to stop. Does that make sense?

[Apryl Skies]

There is a lot of heart beating in this one. Your flow emanates in a solidly, fluid fashion (if i may be so contradictory). I love the use of rhyme threading, imagery and rhythm throughout but the strongest and most pleasurable part of the read was the sentiment. Very nice indeed.

[Nely Amorim]

I truly enjoyed this piece, it was thoughtful and interesting. thank you for entering :)

[D Poet K]

WOW, loved it...

[James K. Blaylock]

Wow, I greatly enjoyed this piece, and I loved this stanza...

And there's nowhere left to run,
There's nowhere left to hide,
There's no meta-space, no
planet orb, no glowing rays
of Jupiter, it's many moons,
it's many circles
going round and round
and round and round we go on
and about in a
roundabout way I'm feeling sick.
Dear God, there's nothing
left but life in all it's danger
and despair and dirt,
There's nothing left but
truth and life.

Best of luck in the voting!

jkb

[Lorna Hutchison]

Something about this got me. 'there's nothing left but life in all its danger and despair and dirt' - this line caught me. Lots of great visuals. I had to read it a few times. Intriguing, thank you! ;-)

[Kiri J]

this is incredibly enigmatic. a random (or not so random) collection of thoughts, images, ideas... written so comprehensively and still so evasively...
this is great.

kiri

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

i love your use of visual imagery